Ugh!! Pam!!

Things are really getting tight!! Kal's in the hands of some pycho-babble Trask goon, Lois can't find Kal and the rock is still on its way!!!

Great section!!!! I can't wait for more!!

Missy

I was hoping that would be Lois on the phone, and overhearing her voice would kick Kal into action. Alas, no...still stuck in the hypnotherapist's clutches. Kal - Lois needs you! The planet needs you! Get up off the couch! Susan

Hi,

Great part.

Uhoh. Gwen is getting too close for comfort. And Lois not close enough!

Great so far!

Absolutely loved the word association. (red sun) (yellow costume girl dancing)

Always love dream sequences in fics. And nice word association stuff too.

Smart boy, our Kal.

But what I especially liked about this section was your use of dialogue to convey relationships, attitudes, emotions, etc. Well done!

my only criticism: where's Bill? ?

c

The word sequence was pretty funny actually. Good job. Poor Kal! Laura

Ohh, Gwen is getting closer!

Jose

Pam

I'm sorry I haven't commented on every section. I've been so busy with work and dancing.

This is excellent.

Tricia

I just love this story!

And now I have to share a funny thing as I was glancing over this the first time.

I missed the word green and a few other things the first time and so it totally changed the following...(glossing is soooo dangerous sometimes!!!)

And since I thought that Kal was uncertain at this point, I took the question marks at the end of 'Kal's' responses as normal...


Here is Pam's work as I thought it read.

By this time I was rolling and then I continued.

Just as I was about to read 'Zara', someone called and distracted me. When my eyes wandered back to the screen, I picked up on the first thing my mind recognized, which was 'flying' and eveything was correct at that point.

When I read the print out later, I picked up on the things I missed and was totally laughing at myself.

James

Interesting how Kal seemed to revert to his autocratic self. It makes me wonder how much he has changed--or how deep that change goes. Darn. I really should have waited until it was done. I don't think I'm up for close calls with Trask when I have to wait between each post. And BTW, hasn't it been forever since part 10 was posted?