Laura, I never look at the Original Fiction Folder, but your title caught my eye and I took a peek.
Some very nice images painted here: gritty squishy-squash, especially, is a fun contrast. Interesting that the naked toes are only outdoors and not inside the house.
Your usage of commas seems a bit inconsistent to me. In some places, you don't bother with punctuation at the end of a line, which seems sensible; but in others, you add what seems to be a very arbitrary comma. This is particularly noticeable in "Oh how I glory,/In naked toes!" Still, free verse is just that -- free -- and everyone has to go with what feels right. I prefer verse without end punctuation, but you clearly feel otherwise.
Cute little poem, Laura, and nice to read when it's drizzling outside my window.
Hazel
I needed an elective, and since I don't know much about writing it, I signed up for the class. I'm not good at it, but hey! No learning or knowledge is ever wasted...