What, you want even more feedback? You're truly insatiable. :p
What I really liked about your story is that you manage to characterize everyone so perfectly that I just don't have the words to describe it. I think that you did find a very great way of shining a new light on Jonathan, with him being a Trekkie and all. Who would have thought?
Of course, there is one little favorite I have. Because I definitely laughed about Lois' choice of C-things to be thankful for. Chinese takeout, indeed.
