Posted by folc4evernaday
Poor Lois. Oh, Poor Clark. Of course Luthor was behind it all.
Yes, Lex is very evil.
Posted by mrsMxyzptlk
By the time I got to the end, I had forgotten that this was just part 1. I was expecting her to just lay down and not get up or for someone to sneak up on her and shoot her or something, then end abruptly on a wham. I'm relieved that there's more time to resolve the story.
Does that mean I had you completely tied up?
Lois is a strong woman, I think the thought of what Clark would want would stop Lois from ending her life, at least for a while.
There are several spots throughout the story where you have left out spaces in between words and in between sentences. You should do a quick read-through to fix those for readability.
I have no idea how the spaces got lost. I have reread the whole thing several times and I was sure I found all spots perhaps I forgot so save the document while working on it...
I think/hope I have found everything now.
Posted by Ultra Woman
Who is it? H. G. Wells? Oh, let it be him! It has to be fixed!
No it isn't H.G. Wells...
Posted by groobie
Quite the cliffhanger you've left us with! Good thing there are two more parts left. There's no way Lois could ever forgive herself if she had killed Superman!
No Lois wouldn't forgive herself, even if she wasn't responsible.
Thank you all for the feedback. The next part will be up in about 10 hours I think. I'll reread it again when I got some hours sleep and some breakfast.
