All I can say is where have you been all this time. These two stories are just amazing. The characterization is just so perfect. I always say that if I see Dean and Teri when I read the story then you have hit the characterization nicely and I see nothing but Dean and Teri when I read your two stories.
Mike... What can I say but THANK YOU. I'm overwhelmed. Really.
After reading many perfect stories in the archives, this means a lot to me.
My wonderful Beta, Cuidadora, must take a LOT of credit to smoothing out the rough angles. (English is NOT my first language.)
I just love the revelation part of the story. Definitely a Lois initial response but then that was colored by her love of the man as she sees how Clark/Superman has treated her even after she was so heartless to him/them. She sees the love the man has for her and it quickly outweighs the annoyance she immediately felt when she made the discovery.
That's what I wanted to convey...
Her heart to heart with Superman earlier in the evening changes everything: Lois is able to see the man behind the disguises (and the 'shield of steel')
Finally the ending has the proper amount of resolution and is open ended. The only thing I would have added would have been a stuttering Clark when she dropped the bombshell of the final sentence.
Are you so sure Clark understands Lois knows? I'm not.
As a matter of fact, I wrote it so it could go both ways.
Lois's previous questions are ambiguous, so Clark may not think she knows CK=S. After all, she said, “This one time, let’s pretend Superman didn’t visit you first and blabbed away my secrets. Or that you didn’t do it before.”, and then she asked, “You do know each other rather well, don’t you?”
I will! Muses, RL and Beta willing!
(but there
won't be a sequel called
Squirming Time!
)
