Very cool
!
I love the structure of this story. The sensory details...then the small, but huge impact line about Lois' heartbeat. How you repeated this throughout made 'Lois' even that much
more important in this piece of work.
A secretary in the executive suites two floors above typing at approximately eighty-seven words per minute.
This detail--with even a type word count--is so awesome. I can really see Clark catching this, knowing this.
The noise of the newsroom, the chaos of the city – all of it fades away the instant he hears her initial plea. All is tuned out except for her comforting heartbeat, the sound he can recognize across space and time. But now that she’s safe, his adrenaline can abate, his fear can subside, and he can process the multitude of the world’s wonders once again.
Love really is the most important thing, isn't it?
. With all his power, with all his ability, Clark's steadfast loyalty to Lois is on full display. You showed how the world
stops for Clark, nothing else matters, if he has any concern for her well-being.
Powerful
. Great job!
Laura
