Very nice, Sara! I love it when new authors come on the scene, and you definitely have an abundance of writing talent.
I really enjoyed this story. You did a nice job of getting into Lois's thoughts in the opening scene, but I really began to sit up and take notice when you introduced Ellen into the story. When she told Lois to disappear and that she would take care of Lex, I wanted to cheer. I enjoy seeing Ellen redeem herself, and your take on her and Sam's history was unique and creative. And you painted a great picture of Lois's trek to Clark's apartment, too.
All in all, this was a nice mix of poignancy and humor. An impressive first effort. I hope we see a lot more from you in the future.
Kathy