If English is not your first language it must be a close second! Punctuation and Spelling were fine, and the Grammar wasn't bad at all. There were a few times that it didn't read like I would have written it, but it was completely understandable.
Now, as the the story itself. I like the show EE and so am quite intrested in your story. I like the premise and have actually thought about something similar, several times.
Interesting twist. It allows us to see more LnC and get an idea of their relationship, thus makeing the story more LnC-centric.
More soon please.
James
