Thank you for taking up the challenge. Ha ha - sweet torture for Clarkie! Yes!

And I love the bit about having been "dating all along" - that was perfect.

Oh wow. I am so thrilled. Thank you MetroRhodes. Can't wait to read the second version either. Awesome!

Going to shut up now before she embarrasses herself.

The Little Tornado.

Wow! I think I need a cold shower - right now!

It´s great! But ... I´m eager for an nfic version of it! Please?

Oh, DJ, that's niiiiice.... the scene on the show was pretty great, but you've definitely vroomed it up a notch or three I love Lois's realization that she's been dating him for a year and a half. And this was great:

I'm all warm and fuzzy over here. Thanks!

PJ

Oooh! Already? COOOOOOL!

*lol* somehow I see Sue's influence, here.

hehehe! ironic, indeed! Love that line!!!

A comment about the Man of Steel seems appropriate here... but that's as much as I'll say, seeing as though this is the G folder.

That is just so yummy!

No kidding! (must... refrain... from.... making.... comments.... about.... .....you know!!!!)

OMG! That is just the most amazing line! Absolutely, just positively... WOW.

Bingo. But that's not exactly what this is about, Lois... It gets better, you just wait.

Oooh! Rolled up sleeves!! /me dances!

The real question is WHY is he hiding it?
*dreamy sigh*

/me dances again.

Thank you, DJ, for a really awesome afternoon break!

Hey!

Seems to be there's a mistake in the title... It's gotta be 1/2... You're not possibly leaving at that. I want her reaction! And then I want some more of that couch business of theirs.

Great story; I just love this fluffy, no plot pieces.

Back to waiting for 50 first revelations

New DJ's story!

There couldn't be a better metaphor. Hee hee.

Here things get more interesting than in the episode. Woohoo!

Mine too.

WOW!

I'm going to hold you to that, you know. I'll waiting and checking the boards non-stop from now on. By the way, I'll check the nfic boards, too. <hint, hint>

Andreia

Lol. Two seconds to come to that conclusion. Seriously, does Lois think she's subtle?

I'm surprised that she then moved on to consider that he might be inexperienced, I guess it's a good way of indicating how she views herself as being special to him.

Anyway very sweet with just the right amount of sexy (heh, for PG fic). I look forward to it's racier counterpart.

alcyone

Oh, such a wonderful variation of Lois and Clark's almost first date.

This was the one line that totally explained their "complicated" relationship. Finally Lois realized that 'date' was just a word.

Very nicely done!

Loved this, DJ. How I wish that something remotely like this actually happened in the episode...but a girl can dream right?

oh yeah...and we all are going to hold you to this:
No! come back here innocent whistler! You're so bad!

Lola

oh this was so sweet. I loved it and Phoenix is one of my favorite episodes.

You rock! This was perfect in every way.

Aww I'm so glad you took up the challenge! I was so excited when I came home and saw this FDK thread on the recently posted list! Anyway, I looooved that episode and you definitely improved it. I too loved the realization that Lois had been dating him for a year. Everything in this was so perfectly described! Thanks for answering the challenge.


Laura

DJ - wowzers! That is one sexy gfic. Just thinking that you have a nfic version up your sleeve makes me dizzy.

And that line "she'd been dating him all along" was just inspired, beautiful. I loved the whole thing.

OMG! That was crazy good. I still have a huge smile on my face and my head is spinning.

Oh and little innocent DJ, you know you want to post the 2nd version.

Jackie

This most definitely needs a sequel.

Sam

I swear to god I already left feedback. I think I'm losing my mind! Anyway I LOVED this.

JD

Sequel, sequel!

This was fantastic! Like everyone else, I will be watching the boards for more.

I know it's already been quoted, but to me that line sort of echoed a certain other line in a certain fic on "the other side" by a certain queen . . .

She's definitely rubbing off on you!

Great googly moogly, that's an awesome fic, DJ!

DJ!!! You're torturing us!!!

Wow!!! That was so... so sweet and sexy. Wowzers.

Adorable!!! Irresistible!!!

This quote is so lovely, though you could have made still more of it in the nfic folder....*sigh*

Perfect!!!



Oh, so sweet... *sigh*

Right, it's their first opportunity... so "Carpe Diem", eh?

I guess you told her, Clark. I'm so glad you did!

Seriously? You're asking? Okay, come over here and I'll whisper the answer to you....


Ann

Without me? You'd get a heck of a lot more real work done, that's for sure.

Cue the "bomp, chicka, chicka, wow, wow" music... Or, you, "I Only Have Eyes For You". That would work too. I suppose the producers couldn't get the rights to the "bomp chicka" tune.

So many comments and so... much for making them on this side of the boards.

Just like Clark - I suddenly became *very* interested. Especially when they ended up on the couch and he was thrown into a carnal panic.

Love the way they're not saying what they're really thinking.

That one got me when I was reading for you and again each time I've read it since. Sheer poetry, DJ. <sigh>

Gosh, how much do I hope that we all get to watch?

<shivers> It always gets me when he says that, whether it's in a fic or on the show. Mmmm.

Ooo! I know! I know! Pick me! Ann, if you really want to know, I have the answer on my hard drive...

Lovely stuff, DJ. You go, girl!

Wow! That was magic and wonderful! Please continue!

Mona

More More More! Laura

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Who, me?

Of all the panics to have, I think this ranks right on top *ahem*

Wonderful, DJ! Sweet and sexy at the same time. Great job

Caroline

<DJ looks at number of fdk responses...looks at Tornado's first sentence...repeats it...>

OMG! OMG! OMG!

*hyperventilates*

WOW! I can't believe all this fdk for my little puff piece. <gawks open-mouthed>

Tornado - you're welcome and thank you for posting the challenge. I'm glad you loved the "dating all along". I was trying to get Lois to think about dating and how dating was for the purpose of getting to know someone better... and she really already knew Clark better, better than any other man she knew. So she really had already been dating him...and just didn't know it.

I'm still... ahem... tweaking the other version...

But I have to point out - that little line you quoted? Sue shared that bit of introspection with me (dang you're good, Sue). Glad to know you liked it as much as I did.

Cornelia - really? A cold shower? From the gfic folder? Woo-hoo <does a little dance> My work is now complete. <g> And I'm working on that other version... soon, I promise...


ChiefPam, hello! Hah - "vroomed it up a notch or 3" totally made my day. Again, I'm so glad the readers enjoyed Lois's realization about the dating. That was something I was pretty proud of. Oh, and you've quoted the other part I really liked - glad it made you all warm and fuzzy. <g>


Hi Lara! LOL - yes, already...now you see why the thank you to Sue was in order. <g> The "long, slow slide" I wrote - but I can't deny being influenced by Sue. She's been my beta for too long and I hers, without there being some influence. <g> She continues to insist that we are cybertwins, although I wouldn't go that far. I'm still just sitting at the foot of her throne. <g>

Hah, several of your comments seemed to be limited by the g folder <snort> I'll see if I can't provide you with a better opportunity in the next couple of days.

Thank you - I'm glad you loved the "souls joined at the mouth line" - it was one of my favorites. Thanks Lara.


Hey Cristina! Hah - you want a sequel? Hmmm... I don't know... I hadn't really considered a sequel. It would be fun to explore her reaction - but would her reaction lead to more business on the couch? <g> I'll give it some thought. Oooooh, and glad to know you're still waiting for 50 First (yay - DJ does happy dance).


Andreia! I'm so glad you enjoyed that line - She had been dating him all along - it seems several of you did - I'm so pleased. <g> As for the "few words" comments - Sue, did you hear that? I'm so proud! You're long, arduous training is beginning to pay off <snort-grin>. Sue is the queen of concise. Every once and a while I get to point out something where she could shorten things up a bit - but not often. <g>

Little teaser? Well I did promise another version, did I not? I see that you're going to keep checking <g> Yes, it will be there soon.


Alcyone! Thank you for the fdk and yay on the "just the right amount of sexy" (for the PG fic) LOL - yes, we'll see if the counterpart has "just the right amount". <g>


Hi Sheila. Eeeeeee! I just love that everyone loved that line. To borrow someone else's word (which I love) it just makes me "squeee" to see so many people quote it. Thanks.


LolaDane I'm glad you loved it. But even if you loved it, you're going to hold me to the other part, huh? Soon. It will be soon. <whistles innocently again and moves along...>


Hello Tahu! Thanks. I "rock"? You know, Sue said that to me the other day... you guys are making me blush. Thank you!


Laura S! Wow, what a compliment - that I improved the episode - thank you. You're welcome - it was a fun challenge. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much.


Hi Lisa! Wowzers - you have no idea how I giggled at that. I hope the nfic lives up to expectations... <shrug> Sue liked it. <g> Thanks again for quoting that line.


Jackie! Crazy good? That made me smile. Yes, innocent little me I'm so glad you enjoyed it.


Thank you so much everyone! Wow! What a start to a morning! I'm just so... wow...

I'm late to this party, but just wanted to say I adored it. Wow!

Most of my favorite bits were quoted already, but also wanted to mention how fun it was to see their parallel thoughts.

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And yet, after things get interesting, Lois realizes how much she knows about Clark at the same time he's realizing how much she doesn't know. Beautiful.

Thanks for writing and sharing it with us.
BJ

I just wanted to add that I think one of the reasons that this passage resonates so much is that many of us recognize it from our own lives. That is the mark of a great writer.

More please!

Ooooh, yippee! More fdk!

Hi BJ. Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. I was really excited to see you point out their "parallel thinking". I had written it that way on purpose and wasn't sure if anyone would pick up on it. I was so happy to see you point it out. Thanks.

Hi Angie. What a compliment! Thank you so much! And thanks for the fdk.

Thanks again everyone. Glad so many of you enjoyed this bit of fluff.

-- DJ

Nice, DJ. Definitely not as good as the other version, but it was nice...