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Save A Slice of Pie For Me (1/15)

Let me know what you think!

-Bek

Wow, I'm not normally one for fics that lengthen Clark's time dealing with New Krypton, but I really, really like this premise! Interesting how Jon was never told. How did they manage to keep that a secret all that time?! Looking forward to part 2! (And then part 3, and 4, and 5...)

I'm curious where you will be taking this. Can't wait for part 2

Looking forward to more, though I wonder why they felt they had to keep that bit a secret. They already told him his dad was away.
Glad he can feel how much his mom loves him! I bet that will be a huge help.

Originally Posted by Ailujecarg

Wow, I'm not normally one for fics that lengthen Clark's time dealing with New Krypton, but I really, really like this premise! Interesting how Jon was never told. How did they manage to keep that a secret all that time?! Looking forward to part 2! (And then part 3, and 4, and 5...)

Yeah, I don't like Clark to be gone for so long either

But I hope you like where this story goes!!

We'll get a little bit of insight into how they kept it a secret in a later chapter!

Originally Posted by bakasi

I'm curious where you will be taking this. Can't wait for part 2

Thanks for reading! It's weird to me with these short little chapters (after the monster chapters I've written for Destined!)... But I'll try to just post one per day

Originally Posted by Blueowl

Looking forward to more, though I wonder why they felt they had to keep that bit a secret. They already told him his dad was away.
Glad he can feel how much his mom loves him! I bet that will be a huge help.

I think it was something they didn't really think through... We'll get just a little bit more insight later (although, of course, since the story is written in Jon's perspective, we don't get ALL the info).

He certainly does feel ALL THE LOVE from his mom. And more than that later too.

Thanks for reading! Chapter 2 coming shortly

-Bek

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Her thoughts then did that thing that Ms. Severs’s thoughts had done, switching from clear sentences to images, feelings, and fragments. And he stumbled and fell to the ground as he felt the weight of his mother’s love hit him all at once. Love and relief. His hands and knees hit the hard packed dirt of the road, and he winced in pain. Tears welled up in his eyes, and although he tried to hold them back, the burden he’d carried with him all day suddenly became too much. He pushed himself over and up into a sitting position, buried his face in his hands, and cried.

My heart goes out for that poor little boy! Imagine everyone in town knows what happened to your Dad, but you are left completely in the dark. Now these strange powers start to surface...

Originally Posted by Morgana

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Her thoughts then did that thing that Ms. Severs’s thoughts had done, switching from clear sentences to images, feelings, and fragments. And he stumbled and fell to the ground as he felt the weight of his mother’s love hit him all at once. Love and relief. His hands and knees hit the hard packed dirt of the road, and he winced in pain. Tears welled up in his eyes, and although he tried to hold them back, the burden he’d carried with him all day suddenly became too much. He pushed himself over and up into a sitting position, buried his face in his hands, and cried.

My heart goes out for that poor little boy! Imagine everyone in town knows what happened to your Dad, but you are left completely in the dark. Now these strange powers start to surface...

YUP. Poor Jon! He's gonna have a lot to deal with coming up.

Thanks for reading!

-Bek

¡¡Pobre Jon!! ¿En verdad puede leer los pensamientos? Seguiré leyendo.

Originally Posted by CarolD

¡¡Pobre Jon!! ¿En verdad puede leer los pensamientos? Seguiré leyendo.

Yes, poor kiddo!