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I can't help but wonder if Bruce knew what was going on between Lois and Superman. Nice to see him added into this story. Oh yeah, that must have been a really large container of French fries!
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Originally posted by Morgana: I can't help but wonder if Bruce knew what was going on between Lois and Superman. Nice to see him added into this story.
Oh yeah, that must have been a really large container of French fries! Bruce knows exactly what's going on. I actually considered writing in Clark hearing him whisper "busted." I still might, when I prep it for the archive.
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Perfect! Who better to appreciate Superman's predicament than 'The Bat'!
Nice guest appearance for Lex as well.
Great to have you back DC!
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Originally posted by Morgana: Perfect! Who better to appreciate Superman's predicament than 'The Bat'!
Nice guest appearance for Lex as well.
Great to have you back DC! Thanks, Morgana! It's good to be back, even if sporadically.
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I really like the part of the story been through so far. However I have to say I was a bit confused.
When I saw DEA, I said to myself "so this is post Dan". Then I realized that it wasn't. In Canon, we do not run into the DEA until Dan shows up, although one would think the DEA would have wanted to go after Miranda after Lois and Clark exposed what she was up to.
It was the EPA that was the agency they were allegedly dealing with in Smallville.
I also am missing how what Lois and Clark are doing at the start of the story is anything but a date. If it doesn't count as a date, I will have to revise down the number of dates I have been on. They are bowling together, just the two of them, and Clark is buying her food. That sounds like a date to me.
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Originally posted by John Lambert: I really like the part of the story been through so far. However I have to say I was a bit confused.
When I saw DEA, I said to myself "so this is post Dan". Then I realized that it wasn't. In Canon, we do not run into the DEA until Dan shows up, although one would think the DEA would have wanted to go after Miranda after Lois and Clark exposed what she was up to.
It was the EPA that was the agency they were allegedly dealing with in Smallville.
I also am missing how what Lois and Clark are doing at the start of the story is anything but a date. If it doesn't count as a date, I will have to revise down the number of dates I have been on. They are bowling together, just the two of them, and Clark is buying her food. That sounds like a date to me. Hi, John! Whoops, I may have written in the wrong agency abbreviation. Thanks for pointing it out. I've definitely been out with my best guy friend where we'll cover each other's costs. I might have gotten the movie tickets one time, he might have gotten it the next. And trust me, we never dated. I also don't see it as any different than all the times Clark bought lunch/breakfast/coffee for Lois in the early days before they were dating. Sure, covering the bowling as well as the food is slightly more, but he's Clark and was raised "old school" to treat the lady, at least, I would assume. Thanks for reading!
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Along the same notes, I think Clark was stupid to turn down going to the celebrity event with Lois. It isn't like Superman needs to be there the whole time. He can have an emergency delay his arrival, so he can really arrive with Lois, and then have to wander off.
OK, it is not ideal, but I am still surprised he gave up time to spend with Lois.
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Originally posted by John Lambert: Along the same notes, I think Clark was stupid to turn down going to the celebrity event with Lois. It isn't like Superman needs to be there the whole time. He can have an emergency delay his arrival, so he can really arrive with Lois, and then have to wander off.
OK, it is not ideal, but I am still surprised he gave up time to spend with Lois. True, but he had no idea how long he would actually manage to stay in the tournament. So it would be really hard to make plans with her. And I doubt he would have been able to get into the event hours after it started. He and everyone else in Metropolis would be attempting to.
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I was surprised at first that Bruce Wayne didn't win the tournament (because, you know, he's Batman, and he's trained his physical abilities to perfection.) Then I realized that OF COURSE he was being safely incognito by being just bad enough to fall out in the middle rounds, among the other celebrities, so no one would think twice about him. Or perhaps it's that Bruce wants it perceived that bowling is too plebeian a sport for billionaire Bruce Wayne. I'm sure he would rather have the paparazzi think that he usually plays polo, but he's going to be in this bowling tournament because it's for charity and it's a photo op for Wayne Enterprises. Then he'll do not-so-well at the tournament, and further distance his billionaire identity from his Caped Crusader identity. When you don't have the ability to change your costume at super-speed, you have to think of these things. The rest of the fic? Loads of fun!
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Originally posted by IolantheAlias: I was surprised at first that Bruce Wayne didn't win the tournament (because, you know, he's Batman, and he's trained his physical abilities to perfection.)
Then I realized that OF COURSE he was being safely incognito by being just bad enough to fall out in the middle rounds, among the other celebrities, so no one would think twice about him.
Or perhaps it's that Bruce wants it perceived that bowling is too plebeian a sport for billionaire Bruce Wayne. I'm sure he would rather have the paparazzi think that he usually plays polo, but he's going to be in this bowling tournament because it's for charity and it's a photo op for Wayne Enterprises. Then he'll do not-so-well at the tournament, and further distance his billionaire identity from his Caped Crusader identity. When you don't have the ability to change your costume at super-speed, you have to think of these things.
The rest of the fic? Loads of fun! Thanks, Io! Yeah, I'm sure Bruce is laying low with what he's capable of. Or maybe, just like Clark, for all his physical prowess, he's not a great bowler either - though better than Clark!
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Hi Vicki! The only real specifications were that someone's secret be revealed. This is what my twisted muse came up with. Superman: Lois, I can’t bowl. "You can't honestly tell me that you, of all people, aren't all about sports competition, Mr. College Football Player." No, he was more in it for the cheerleaders. And they really were in it for the looks of the players. "And a high school friend went to college on a bowling scholarship." Sounds like a more sound argument than the one she made for ‘chumpy’. He wasn't even trying to do poorly, to maintain his cover and to make Lois happy. :rolleyes: He’s not a smart one, is he? Lois doesn’t like to win like that. She wants a competition. She wants to put come out ahead because she’s better than he is, not because he’s got no idea about what goes where. "I thought the winner was supposed to buy?" Clark said, grinning. "You know. Nurse my deflated ego and all." Since it was the middle of the afternoon on a weekday, relatively few people were in the bowling alley. Playing hooky? But all of the proceeds were going to charity, so how could he possibly say no? You start with your teeth together, then you open your mouth while exhaling, trying to produce a sound. . It was funny, in a way. She could have Superman if only she would give Clark a chance, LOIS: I don’t that’s funny at all. "I didn't know you ate with your left hand," Lois observed.
Clark swallowed before answering. "Sometimes, yeah."
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"I don't know," he replied, shrugging. "I just do, sometimes. I guess it's a habit I've had since I was a kid. I'm not even sure when it started, to be perfectly honest. Why?" Seeeeecret! "And that's the end of the game," Lois announced. "I win." Did he really just buy food right before the end of that round? "If it wasn't for the gutter, I think my balls would be homeless. Err, I mean...well...you know." He blushed as the double meaning that his words held hit him. Michael
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Hi, Michael! Superman: Lois, I can’t bowl. Lois: <rolls eyes> You'll say anything to make me feel better, won't you? No, he was more in it for the cheerleaders. And they really were in it for the looks of the players. Sounds like a more sound argument than the one she made for ‘chumpy’. Lois: I can argue just fine. I was captain of the speech and debate team. And don't tell me that's not a real club! He’s not a smart one, is he? Lois doesn’t like to win like that. She wants a competition. She wants to put come out ahead because she’s better than he is, not because he’s got no idea about what goes where. Clark: I know what goes where! It's about opportunity. I mean.... Day off, since they sometimes work weekends. You start with your teeth together, then you open your mouth while exhaling, trying to produce a sound. Clark: <tries, winds up making Chewbacca noises> LOIS: I don’t that’s funny at all. BRUCE: What? Billionaire Playboy here. Not a fitness and sports fanatic with great hand-eye coordination. Bruce: This is not the hero you're looking for. Move along. Move along. To be fair, back on Krypton, they played Mayan Style. Using a ball instead of a proper severed head is just not the same. Blargh! Did Joffrey gain access to Krypton??? Uh oh. She discovered that both Clark and Superman are lefties who don’t know better. Did something finally click? Click. Thanks, Michael! Glad you enjoyed this half of things.
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Lois: I can argue just fine. I was captain of the speech and debate team. And don't tell me that's not a real club! Michael
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Is that what happened to Lex during HoL? The wedding took too long and Lois got hungry? Lois: Actually, he refused to have chocolate mousse as the cake filling. Actually, most of it could easily work in PG-13. Well, all of it. But a dark version would be appreciated, too. MUSE: - EW: No, that’s not with Red K. That’s using…something else. Another plot device. No, shush! /uses Vulcan nerve pinch/ Go to sleep. Can't say I haven't thought about a Red K mixed with the PML perfume idea...Not that I have much time to write these days... JOKER: I can make him fly! - ROBERT: Make the birdman *fly*! Oh dear. Who built a moon door into Wayne Tower? Lord Nor, why some bastards should never be allowed to mate and produce offspring. *nods*
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quote: Is that what happened to Lex during HoL? The wedding took too long and Lois got hungry?
Lois: Actually, he refused to have chocolate mousse as the cake filling. CLARK: And Tempus thinks *I’m* the stupid one! Oh dear. Who built a moon door into Wayne Tower? Michael
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