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Well I have posted my story. I have to admit that it ends a bit abruptly, and maybe I cheat to end it, but oh well.
It was part of a story challenge, and I figured I would actually go through with a story.
John Pack Lambert
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Congratulations on posting your first story, John!  Whoa. You had us twisting backwards and forwards and upside down. I was wondering what Wells what up to. Clearly he doesn't have that soul tracker technology down yet.  I'm surprised that Clark didn't say "Of course, I go out whenever there are robberies, Lois, I'm a reporter. That's my job!" I bet that was a weird daydream experience for Clark. Fun little story in which nothing gets solves, Clark gets mixed up, and Wells makes mistakes. Enjoyable ride.
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I enjoyed this a lot. When you brought in Wells I was expecting a new take on "Soul Mates" ( which, BTW, had been on my mind for a while but I can't quite get the concept to gel.). I liked it although it got me intrigued for more.
CLARK: No. I'm just worried I'm a jinx.
JONATHAN: A jinx?
CLARK: Yeah. Let's face it, ever since she's known me, Lois's been kidnapped, frozen, pushed off buildings, almost stabbed, poisoned, buried alive and who knows what else, and it's all because of me.
-"Contact" (You're not her jinx, you're her blessing.)
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Aw, poor Clark. We were so close to getting a much better ending for that amnesia arc! Ah, well; leave it to H.G. Wells to muddle things up like that.  Thanks for this challenge response, btw! I would never have thought of Wanda! 
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This was crazy. Fun, but crazy. I had to read it three times before it all sunk in. Wanda, then Lola, then Lois-but-not-Lois and then just giving up and going with Wanda. I came out of this thinking that there someone needs to institute "License to Operate" restrictions on time travel devices.  Really fun concept!!! Well done.  Bob
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I was tempted to fix the amnesia arc, but I posted a story where I did that on another L&C discussion board once, so I figured I should leave this one unfixed.
I know I should create plot-complications in my stories, even though I am tempted not to.
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Fun story! An amnesiac Lois (thinking to be Wanda) sent to the past! It was prone to be a disaster! Wanda, Lola, Lois, Clark, Kent... Suddenly two people became a crowd. I just suggest you get a beta for your stories. I was thrown out by the missing question marks.  Andreia
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Only one word for this story. Hilarious! 
Morgana
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Fun ride, John! Good to see you've posted your first fic! Loved it, Clark facing Wanda much earlier on made for an interesting tale. I wonder what other chaos Wanda could have gotten them into had Wells not shown up at that moment...
Nothing spoils a good story like the arrival of an eye witness.
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Maybe I should have gone longer with it, but I think it worked. I figure if Wanda had been left with Clark much longer her meories would have returned and disruption would have subsided.
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