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Sorry this is so late. I've been sick and had two finals today. I actually totally forgot about posting until Pam, ever so subtly, reminded me. Some major rewriting of this section. What do you think?  Annie
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Annie, Being sick and having finals is not an excuse! I am glad Pam reminded you before I had to. I was getting close to sending you an irate message. But I was too involved reading Anybody's Baby to remember to do that  . Should I tell you again how much I am loving this story? Maybe you're sick of hearing it . This part was so good - and the description of everything going on was absolutely incredible! I could just see Lois and Clark dancing in the club! It felt like I was there watching the whole thing. It was so sensual, but not anywhere close to "smutty" at the same time. Aah, happy sigh 
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Annie A fantastic part!  I'm thoroughly enjoying this and look forward to the next part. Tricia 
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Well, I hope you are feeling better, and that you did okay on your exams. That said, I'm *really* glad you posted this today. This bit of sweetness was something I needed after the craziness that was today... (Today is the first day of the new term, and that is *always* stressful.) I'm looking forward to the next part Melisma (totally WAFFed out here under her Rock)
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Yay, you posted This was great, Annie. Bits I loved -- --Clark covering for Lois even with Jimmy, and her reaction --"The Left Wing" ... lol --Clark's telling Paul to get the heck away --Lois dragging Clark onto the dance floor --the way she sat in his lap!  --that kiss! Can't wait to see how they both try to convince themselves it wasn't real --bedtime, and a bedtime kiss. PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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Nice part Annie ~Liz
Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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**Glances covertly aroudn** Annie, being sick with finals IS an excuse! (But of course this is coming from the "I write two pages of fanfic a month" Club, so I'll recommend listening to the ficus tree people for now.) stop stressing about all the deeper meanings in everything Ahhh! That's fine for Clark, but I'm dying here! I can't WAIT til they admit what's really going on! 
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I really love your 'Playing' series - the premise is brilliant and the writing beautiful. Eagerly awaiting the next part Hopeless chocoholic
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Hi, Great part! Sweet. More soon, please. MAF 
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Annie, still loving it. I like your revisions, Lois's surprise that Clark was protecting her secret, even from Jimmy. Hasn't she figured out yet that she can trust him? :rolleyes:
And the scene in the club is definitely steamier in the rewrite - very nice. The bit with Lois plopping herself unexpectedly in Clark's lap was wonderful.
Much as I loved it, I was surprised to see the way you rewrote the kiss on the dance floor. Before was just a mere brushing of lips, but this is "more"... and as you point out in the next paragraph, Clark realizes that Lois must have known what she was doing. I am curious to know how this is going to affect what originally came several parts later in your story, and I'm looking forward to the rewrites on that as well!
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Annie
I still love this
just read 4 & 5
keep it coming
quickly please
merry
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I'm so glad everyone seems to have loved the new stuff in this section. Yes, I fleshed out the dance floor scene quite a bit. I have to give credit to Kathy for much of this. She was the one who kept encouraging me to play it up. (Imagine that, Kathy wanting a steamy dance floor scene. Something new for her. <G>) My cold is a little better today, though not much. But I'm hurtling towards my deadline on my Advanced Editing project, so I don't have time for any more comments if I'm going to get the next part out tonight. Somehow I think you'd rather see part 6 than my ramblings. Thanks again, Annie
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