Sorry this is so late. I've been sick and had two finals today. I actually totally forgot about posting until Pam, ever so subtly, reminded me.

Some major rewriting of this section. What do you think?

Annie

Annie,

Being sick and having finals is not an excuse! I am glad Pam reminded you before I had to. I was getting close to sending you an irate message. But I was too involved reading Anybody's Baby to remember to do that .

Should I tell you again how much I am loving this story? Maybe you're sick of hearing it . This part was so good - and the description of everything going on was absolutely incredible! I could just see Lois and Clark dancing in the club! It felt like I was there watching the whole thing. It was so sensual, but not anywhere close to "smutty" at the same time. Aah, happy sigh

Annie

A fantastic part!

I'm thoroughly enjoying this and look forward to the next part.

Tricia

Well, I hope you are feeling better, and that you did okay on your exams. That said, I'm *really* glad you posted this today. This bit of sweetness was something I needed after the craziness that was today... (Today is the first day of the new term, and that is *always* stressful.)

I'm looking forward to the next part

Melisma (totally WAFFed out here under her Rock)

Yay, you posted This was great, Annie. Bits I loved --

--Clark covering for Lois even with Jimmy, and her reaction
--"The Left Wing" ... lol
--Clark's telling Paul to get the heck away
--Lois dragging Clark onto the dance floor
--the way she sat in his lap!
--that kiss! Can't wait to see how they both try to convince themselves it wasn't real
--bedtime, and a bedtime kiss.

PJ

Nice part Annie

~Liz

**Glances covertly aroudn** Annie, being sick with finals IS an excuse! (But of course this is coming from the "I write two pages of fanfic a month" Club, so I'll recommend listening to the ficus tree people for now.)


Ahhh! That's fine for Clark, but I'm dying here! I can't WAIT til they admit what's really going on!

I really love your 'Playing' series - the premise
is brilliant and the writing beautiful.

Eagerly awaiting the next part
Hopeless chocoholic

Hi,

Great part! Sweet.

More soon, please.

MAF

Annie, still loving it. I like your revisions, Lois's surprise that Clark was protecting her secret, even from Jimmy. Hasn't she figured out yet that she can trust him? :rolleyes:

And the scene in the club is definitely steamier in the rewrite - very nice. The bit with Lois plopping herself unexpectedly in Clark's lap was wonderful.

Much as I loved it, I was surprised to see the way you rewrote the kiss on the dance floor. Before was just a mere brushing of lips, but this is "more"... and as you point out in the next paragraph, Clark realizes that Lois must have known what she was doing. I am curious to know how this is going to affect what originally came several parts later in your story, and I'm looking forward to the rewrites on that as well!

Kathy

Annie
I still love this
just read 4 & 5
keep it coming
quickly please
merry

I'm so glad everyone seems to have loved the new stuff in this section. Yes, I fleshed out the dance floor scene quite a bit. I have to give credit to Kathy for much of this. She was the one who kept encouraging me to play it up. (Imagine that, Kathy wanting a steamy dance floor scene. Something new for her. <G>)

My cold is a little better today, though not much. But I'm hurtling towards my deadline on my Advanced Editing project, so I don't have time for any more comments if I'm going to get the next part out tonight. Somehow I think you'd rather see part 6 than my ramblings.

Thanks again,
Annie