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Missing Lois - TOC A taste of Chapter 2: The Twilight Zone Part 1 Lois awoke to the sound of murmured sounds of television. She blinked her eyes. Where was she? She looked around and realized she was at Clark’s. Then she noticed the loft. The alternate Clark’s apartment. Oh, yes, her new life. With a yawn and stretch, she walked out to the living room.
Clark was sitting on his couch watching baseball, munching on carrot sticks. The volume was low, but as soon as he saw her, he turned it off. “Sorry. Did I wake you?”
“No. It’s all right. Watch your game.” She shook her head, trying to wipe the strangest feeling out of her head. She sat down at the dining room table trying to remember that dream. Clark was there. Her Superman. She sighed. He had saved her from Lex and the clone. She closed her eyes to see if she could feel Clark’s lips pressed against hers again. This dream was so fresh, so clear.
“Are you sure you are all right?” Clark asked pulling her out of her daydream. He hadn’t turned the game back on. He sat down next to her, worried.
“I’m fine. I just had the strangest dream. Oh, it felt so real. Clark was there.” Lois realized that she was talking to Clark. “My Clark. Instead of me going all Wanda Detroit crazy, Superman rescued me. And he flew me over the clouds and away from it all.” She sighed. “Far away.”
Clark had the strangest expression on his face. Somewhere between shocked and dismayed and delighted, like he himself couldn’t decide how he felt about what she had just told him. What had she just told him? Had she said that out loud? Hope you enjoy. Still on the look-out for Beta Readers, if anyone is interested. Thank you for all your kind comments on my previous posts.
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I didn't realize these sections were just part of one chapter. I wondered how you were going to be able to ressolve matters with one part left  . I like how you've used Star here. She can be annoying but dead on other times. You've set things up nicely for Clark's return with lots of questions yet to answer. Joan
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It is getting interesting. Still with you. Post soon. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
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Intriguing part... I loved the rescue at the beginning Didn't we ALL wish that had happened in canon (maybe not alt-Clark rescuing a past Lois... but the basic sentiment was there!) I like your use of Star. I rarely see her in fanfic-- in fact, I can't think of one with her in it. She can be a good comic relief. Can't wait to see where you go with this!
Reach for the moon, for even if you fail, you'll still land among the stars... and who knows? Maybe you'll meet Superman along the way. 
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So far so good. This is going to be a difficult fic to pull off what with the juggling of the two different Lois' and their being put into their separate challenges.
You've handled it quite well in the first 'chapter'.
Looking forward to seeing how our Loises handle their upcoming life changes.
Tank (who says it is too bad about the pregnancy though... never like to see Lois pregnant)
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Poor, confused, Lois!
A nice finish to Part One. Looking forward to Part Two.
Joy,
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Thank you all for your kind comments. I didn't realize these sections were just part of one chapter. I wondered how you were going to be able to ressolve matters with one part left. Joan, to answer your question. I am currently working on Chapter 10, which I hope will be the final chapter (there was only supposed to be 3, but the characters just took off on me). I've just broken Chapter 2 into parts and it looks like there will be approximately 8 sections per chapter... giving you lots to read.  I love the concept of Star and, yes, she will make another appearance or two in few of the other chapters. Personally, I think she was the best part of Contact, especially if you take Lois's new haircut and Clark's relationship 'fever' into account. Another note, the scene between the Clone and Luthor (which was in Chaper 1, part 3) takes place in the afternoon instead of at night as in the show. I changed this scene because it worked better for the plotting of the 'rescue' scene. Other than that, one minor line change (coming up in Chapter 2), and one MAJOR timeline, not plot, change in Season 4 (Chapter 3), this story works around what actually happened on the show. Will post next section tomorrow (Tuesday) 5/3, unless giant asteroid makes me up my posting schedule. 
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I'm really enjoying this so far. You're a very professional writer and it's a lot of fun to read! You've set up an excellent plot with a lot of drama. I love Star! What's funny is that she's really right on, but nobody but us readers know it! She did appear in ML Thompson's recent Kerth-winning fic, "Nowhere To Run" . I'm also really happy to learn that there are ten chapters and the chapters are long! Yay! Here's hoping that no giant asteroid interferes with your posting schedule.
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Iolanthe, you beat me to it  Michael
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To update any new readers. Most chapters ended up having 10-12 parts to them (and a couple 13) totaling 109 parts (including Epilogue). I started breaking up the chapters into shorter parts after Chapter 2, because so much information was happening per part, I thought it might be easier to digest in smaller portions. I have also created a Summary / Synopsis link (which you can access easily through the Missing Lois - Table of Contents ), in case after reading a chapter you get a bad case of the huhs  If alt-Clark accidently kidnapped Clois by mistake! She and Clark have a happy reunion before she dies a horrible death? Well, you never know...
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You do realize the Lois in this part was entirely the Substitute Lois brought from the past, right? Yep. Got it somewhere during/just after the dream So, post-wedding-post-wedding--post-honeymoon-pre-wedding Lois? If alt-Clark accidently kidnapped Clois by mistake! Oh dear. Also, with her 2-week lifespan, it would give a very new and interesting twist to the whole curse thing. And Clark a flashback Michael
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