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Thanks.

Corrina.

Ohhh, great part, Corrina. The tease was great too. Can't wait to see Lois take 'em down.

I have a suggestion. This doesn't sound American to me: "Luthor Foundation for Sick Children", it sounds British or Australian. We'd do something more like "Luthor Children's Crusade" or "Luthor Children's Foundation." We never (or seldom) use the the term "sick" in a title or the disease itself. For instance, Easter Seals started fighting polio and then general paralysis diseases and now it's any disability. Ronald McDonald House helps the families of children with cancer by giving them a place to stay during the child's treatment.
We love being vague about these things. This might give you some ideas: http://www.charitywatch.org/toprated.html
Just a suggestion.
Keep it coming!

Artemis

Wow! Love their relationship and how it's developing and their support of each other. Your descriptions are so clear -- I could just see the two of them sizing each other up in their spandex, trying not to... um... lose control.

Ooh, Mayson is so evil in this story.

Mayson is pure evil and maybe a little deranged - hope something unfortunate will happen to her and that she won't use the green rock.

Loved Lois and Clark's interaction!

CAT FIGHT!!!

Mayson is a little too evil in this story, I think. I hate that she wanted to have Clark for herself in the show, but how can we blame her? In other respects she was a rather likable character, in the same way that Dan Scardino was rather likable, except that he was flirting with the wrong woman.

But I accept Mayson's evil and unreasonable personality in this fic. I'm still waiting for her to contact Seb and have him put her piece of kryptonite in a ring for her. It will be up to Lois to save Clark when Mayson attacks him with her kryptonite, or so I think anyway.

And then there's Hawthorn. How will Lois save them? Maybe Clark can help, now that he is a member of the club.

And I'm looking forward to the interview!

Ann

But... won't that be a bit awkward if Superman sits on Lois's and Dan's bed, telling them about the horrors of his latest rescue while Lois and Dan snuggling and basking in the afterglow?

Hmm... I think she's referring to the wrong suit there.

Now, isn't that a bit excessive? /starts looking for the friendly men in the white coats carrying long-sleeved vests and butterfly nets/

This was a nice, smooth-sailing part. Can't wait for the big bang.

Michael

I haven't been commenting lately, Corrina, but I'm still reading. I like the way you're contrasting the soft, gentle progress of their relationship with the stress of Hawthorne's impending demise and the slightly wacko Mayson Drake out to get Superman. It's a good balance.

And I'm glad Lois now has parental figures to lean on in Jonathan and Martha. She's a mature adult, of course, and she's not going to go all Paris Hilton on Martha (Paris broke down and cried for Mommy when she was sentenced to jail for a few days), but young adults need older adults to model maturity for them. It helps both parties.

Love the mutual attraction between Superman and Ultra Woman. I also like it that both of them were distracted from each others' faces. Passion should be mutual.

I have reconsidered. Mayson isn't just a little whack, she's obsessive-compulsive. Even Luthor never hid Kryptonite under three pairs of shoes neatly lined up.

Hey, maybe Dan will "accidentally" find it and take it, not knowing what it is. Wouldn't that just fix her little red wagon!

This is a compelling story, Corinna. Keep it coming!

Still here! Like Terry, commenting less, but surely keeping up (and still enjoying the ride very very very much )

As for this part, I'd pick this bit:

That, and, in general, what it implies: that they're really there for each other, than they are able to sympathise with their situations, even if for Lois Superman was almost a fictional character up until a few weeks back and for Clark footie something even foreigner

Looking forward to the interview!

Artemis Thanks for the suggestion. The actual title of the charity isn't relevant to the fic (although it should sound American), so I'll change it to the 'Luthor Children's Foundation'.

Evelyn

In a nutshell - that's the entire fic. Now why has it taken me 30+ parts to say what you said in one sentence?

Thanks, Evelyn.

DW Thanks. Mayson is not nice - that's about all I'm saying!

SJH Mayson vs Linda vs Lois - with poor Clark in the middle!

Ann Mayson is evil - however, I needed a villain. I could have used an original character, but the canon foundation for Mayson was good - she didn't like Lois, she was attracted to Clark, she wasn't a fan of Superman, she was ambitious and successful in her job. Granted, I've taken her a lot further, but who needs wimpy villains?

Thanks, Ann.

Michael

It won't be awkward at all if Lois is never in Dan's bed!

Thanks, Michael.

Terry Hi, Terry. I hope the healing process is going well.

Thanks for the comment re balance. It's one of those things - like pace - that can be difficult to judge when you're so close to a story.

Dan finding the green rock - I hadn't thought of that.

Cristina It's a bit late, but congrats to Spain!!

Exactly - thank you!


Part 37 has been completely obstinate, but it is finally written. I'll get 32 posted tomorrow - either afternoon or evening.

Thanks,

Corrina.

But that's why we're here! For the 30 or more parts. Drag it out as long as you want!

Artemis

Artemis is exactly right! We love every chapter in which you make us endure untold agony of: elation, exquisite torture in getting through their ups and downs, and immeasurable pleasure in rooting for them and for you in writing it!

/slaps head/ Of course! You really are a sneaky one. I wish, I had thought of that before getting all worried

Michael