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Yay, a sequel!  This was very cute and I could really see Lois going through all that <g> Great banter, and a great kiss. The line about sounding like an expert sex scene in a movie seemed a little... jarring. If it were me, I'd rephrase it more romantically. Of course, it's not me <g> But I love the last line: a kiss that rivaled the one before. Nice way to tie into the episode title! PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
--Stardust, Caroline K
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Oh, terrific sequel, Jo! I simply adore this dialogue: “I’m feeling something,” she said. He closed his mouth and stared at her.
“I thought I was supposed to guess.”
“You were taking too long.”
“You didn’t give me a chance.”
“I gave you more than one.”
“Can I kiss you?”
“Yes, you can.” Oh yeah.  I think I agree with Pam about that Hollywood movie line, but other than that this is perfect! So, when do we get more???  Wendy
Just a fly-by! *waves*
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Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
Caroline's "Stardust"
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Jocelyn This is great.  Tricia 
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Cute, sweet and funny  Jose 
"Practice up your shielding spells...and remember to duck if you see green light coming your way." Harry Potter to Wizengamot in OotP trial A Bad Week in the Wizengamot
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Hi, Cute story. She walked to the door, but hesitated with her hand over the doorknob. “If I were smart, I’d open this door and immediately ignore everything that has happened tonight.”
“But...” Clark prodded. He held his breath, praying she’d turn around, run to him, and cover him in soft kisses. He was glad he could hold his breath for a long time, as Lois didn’t respond for several minutes.
“But, being smart is so overrated.” She turned and with such determination and purpose, she was in his arms, looping hers about his shoulders, and kissing his lips in a kiss that rivaled the one before. Cute.
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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Very nice sequel, Jo! I enjoyed reading this very much. I like how Lois is able to overcome her fears and admit she hasn't stopped feeling what she was feeling before.
-- Roger
"The Constitution only gives people the right to pursue happiness. You have to catch it yourself." -- Benjamin Franklin
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