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Terry -

Excellent, as always.

I'm not entirely sure I followed the B39 stuff, except that I think they have synthetic K or something [that's probably due to lack of sleep rather than lack of information in the segment ].

Clark did the right thing by asking Lois if it was okay with her if they went, but even though Robin kissed him, I'm not sure he gets it. And whether he gets it or not... My feeling is that this is one of those times where he doesn't have to get it, he just has to get it. He may not understand, but this is one instance where he has to believe Lois when she says it's important enough to her to be making pro and con lists about him and if it's that important to her, then maybe he should just do what she needs him to whether he understands or not.

[I'm not sure that came out right but... ].

More soon please. Still not sure how you're going to wrap this up in 2 parts...

Carol

This has the feeling of a tragedy waiting to happen...

Why couldn't he say: "I don't like you doing that"? The way he puts it, Robin's twisted mind is going to see Lois as the only impediment between them.

On the edge of my seat waiting next part.

Andreia

And there was the biggest mistake ever. It shouldn't have been "I don't think Lois..." it should have been "I don't like...."

Don't have time to say anything intelligent this time, Terry.

But I agree with the others that this has the feeling of a tragedy. A Greek tragedy, or a Shakespearian tragedy. In those, the hero was often a good man who, nevertheless, had some sort of flaw. (Don't we all?) But this hero's flaw is exposed to just the sort of situation or temptation that it, and he, can't deal with. And so he falls. Have you seen the Disney movie, Hercules? There is a scene there where Phil, Hercules' coach, taps the heel of a statue of Achilles, and the statue promptly shatters into a million tiny little pieces.

I don't think Clark will be as thoroughly undone in this fic as the Achilles statue was in Hercules. But the situation is serious and ominous. So let me come up with one more literary comparison for you fic, Terry: I guess Robin might be Clark's Achilles heel.

And not only does your story feel like a tragedy waiting to happen, but is also has the breathless feeling of a thriller. And it is excellently written as always.

Ann

oh, yes... definitely a great story
worthy of many accolades

and while I'm ashamed of my low level of knowledge into Greek tragedies, I would definitely rate the themes expressed here as being comparable to a Shakespearian play-(I'm tossing up between comedy and tragedy for the genre... this depending on the ending which according to scholars does not need humour, just a happy or sad conclusion)

Yeah, Clark really stepped in the brown applesauce when he didn't tell Robin that he didn't want her to kiss him. I was so hoping that wasn't too subtle, but I can't slip anything past y'all! And doesn't she pack a punch?

Like I wrote earlier, Barbara (love your sig, by the way), the ending will be a resolution, just not necessarily a happy one. And I really like all the classical allusions in the feedback! It makes me feel like a real writer (especially since I didn't have any of those allusions in mind - at least, not consciously) when I wrote this.

Look for the next chapter on Monday.

Ok... so you know I'm tragically addicted to this story... however, first I have to bring up a terminology issue which really bugged me with this part..

Southern ice cap. That's a northern hemisphere terminology for the Arctic, it is not used for the Antarctic region, and I can't believe Clark would be that naive.
I think perhaps you were intending the Antarctic Ice Pack? Or the Antarctic Ice Sheet, although neither make much sense with the "shifting" description. The Antarctic Ice Sheet sits atop the continent of Antarctica... even Superman would be hard pressed to 'shift' it. The Ice Packs however do grow and contract over time... again, I wouldn't read this as 'shifting'...
I dunno... it just didn't make much sense to me (admittedly I haven't done antarctic glaciology since university some 15 years ago, but still)

Aside from that... as I said.. enjoying the story..
I'm intrigued by the 'cage' (?) that was built to hold Superman. Sounds scary... but I think Lois should be taking Robin for a casual walk down into it, pushing her in, lock it up and throw away the key...
I'm glad she's got the kryptonite on her now... but I worry about whether she can get to it fast enough...

It is pretty obvious Robin's intentions are to 'have' Clark. And yet the lunkhead still doesn't see it!!! Men... honestly... they can be so stupid sometimes. Anyone got a cruise liner handy to smash into Clarks head? The problem is... I think that's a true thing... men (and women too) sometimes see slight flirtation as something harmless, irrelevant.. so they miss the malicious intention of the act...
I also disliked the fact Clark laid the 'reason' as Lois... it gives Robin false hope to persue him if she can take Lois out of the equation.

This is heading down a path I'm not sure I want to see it go.. but it does seem like the natural flow can't be stopped, unless Lois has something up her sleeve stronger than the kryptonite.

I am intrigued by your story Terry, and it brings out strong emotions for me towards the characters. I enjoy stories that challenge the norm, whether they end up with a happily ever after ending or a more tragic result. I like that you are willing to take the risks needed to take these characters out of their normal comfort zones and into a darker place...

This isn't my kind of plotline... but I can't help but find out what happens, so great job on the suspense factor and all.... and aside from the kiss...

Hmmmmm... how close ARE they related? At least Clark seems to be noticing a few more slip ups on Robin's part, though to bring up the "little sister" mentality... if he so thoroughly views her in a platonic role it makes more sense that he's missing the cues. Like when people tell me my little brother is hot... I just don't see it. Maybe if Clark can CATCH her in a deception or in a more over attempt to get him to play Adam to her Eve he'll wake up some more, though I already have my theories about how this will end... can't wait to see how far off I am.

Okay already...

post!

Come on!

Carol