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Wow! For a non-writer, that was very, very powerful!

I loved this. Well done.

Irene

Very nice! (And yes, you did things just fine ) I've always had a certain fondness for Lt. Ching, and you did a great job with him. Very poignant, the contrast between Zara's hope (they can find Kal-El and fix everything) and Ching's hopelessness (he'll never be able to be with Zara). Thanks for sharing it with us!

PJ

I was supposed to be closing down the mbs and pc before heading to bed...but somehow I find myself reading story comments and then I had to check this out.

The New Kryptonians were never my favourite characters, but I have to say that this was very sweet, Keri, and made me like both Ching and Zara more than I usually do. Your prose is very lyrical...for a non-writer. I especially liked the repeat on the first paragraph and you have a keen sense of getting inside your character's head and painting his emotions.

Don't forget to send this along to the Archive if you want to - it'll be very welcome!

Welcome to the playground - hope to see more from you! And don't worry about not getting the details right - we don't tend to yell for that here. If you get it wrong someone might nudge you gently in the right direction, but that's about it.

LabRat

Hey welcome!

And um yeah, whatever; you are so a writer just waiting to happen! That was really amazing, and you should think about writing more often.

JD

Not a writer? You could have fooled me.
(and you know, most of us aren't writers either, really... I'm not - I just pretend.)

This was a great little fic. I hope you'll be back with more, Keri!

Welcome to the ranks of the addicted, Keri. Your initial offering is excellent. One of the story forms I've never been able to master is the short, meaningful vignette, but you nailed it first time out of the box. I'm jealous of yet another writer.

And yes, you are a writer. If you put words in a row, have the courage to put them in front of people and let them express their feelings about your creation, you are a writer. I hope we see many more high-quality offerings from you in the near future. Thank you for sharing this one.

Very well done! I've never been a fan of either Zara or Ching since the two of them took Clark away from Lois. (And at least in my country it was not so sure if there would be a season 4)

But you described the two of them and Ching especially, in a way that makes me liking them. Impressive! Don't tell you're not a writer. Because if you make me feel what your characters feel, you most definitely are a writer. Unlike some people who actually published books.

You'll all forgive me if this fdk makes me a bit fangirlish. It's so strange to see the names of people whose fics I've read.

Hi Irene!

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I really haven't written anything since high school and that was a very, very long time ago.

Hey PJ,

Don't get me started on NK as it was treated. I'll have to be in agreement with a lot of the views I've seen from FOLCdom. So much potential and yet, the series rushed it. I think I was addressing one of the parts that seemed the most interesting to me--the dynamic between Ching and Zara, which I thought wasn't built nearly enough. I'm really glad you liked it (and that I did everything correctly )

Labrat!

I'm glad you decided to read my little snippet even not liking the Kryptonians.

I think it's just the fact that I don't know if what I write truly sounds good or if it's all in my head. I'm happy this worked out well, it felt like a gamble--there's a lot of sentences I felt unsure about. I'm definitely seeing the beauty of having a beta.

As for capturing Ching, I do think the whole control of the self thing is interesting especially with respect to the circumstances. I tried to keep that balance--like I wasn't sure that he'd outright mention he loves Zara, even in his head. So I fell back on "knowing her" as a type of admission close to that. So when he says that knowing her is not enough in my head it sounds like loving her is not enough.

Hey JD:

This was really fun (even second guessing every word I wrote haha). I'd love to write more. It's just the whole idea thing (apart from the putting it into writing thing ). I can't even imagine writing anything long--but I have some ideas floating around. Lets see if I manage to get them on paper.

LaraMoon!

Pretend?! You wrote a whole novel, missy. Don't think I'm THAT new. By the way your avatar rocks my world. This experience really helped though, so I might "pretend" some more. Hopefully like Labrat said--if I make some glaring error people will just push me onto the right path without kicking my butt

Hi Terri!

Wow. I'm taken back at this. Thank you so much. What I wrote was so small in the face of so many fics that truly draw me in. How about you and I trade? I'll trade you any "vignette skills" I may have for your skills in crafting long fics that have spot on characterizations and well-thought out, amazing plots.

Hi Bakasi,

I know! What a season ender, I wanted to scream. I really wanted Lois to go with them, it would have made it less the cheap "We're going to try to keep them apart" plot device.
I'm happy I made you like them


Thanks everyone for taking the time to reply and let me know what you think. This is all really encouraging--I look forward to posting again some time.

Welcome Keri. Wow! Nicely done.

Jackie

Thanks so much!