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Wendy, Wendy, Wendy. You give us a little hope, and then you *yank* it away, like pulling the rug out from under our feet and sending us tumbling onto our rears. I was so hoping, along with everyone else, that the vial held the answers. But the road you pave is never easy, is it? However, I did love Lois's thoughts about Clark. And the end of this part! Go, Lois! If you can't take control of one aspect of your life, grab hold of the rest with both hands and yank it where you want to go.

I'm about to fall off my seat, since you keep leaving us at the edge of it. When are you going to let us sit securely again?

Since I can't really see the screen at the moment ... I'll have to come back later to post feedback ... but Wendy I just have to say, YOU ARE BREAKING MY HEART!!

Yes, and then Clark blithely dismissing the flakes of "something metallic". Having this be mercury is their "only" hope, but Lois doesn't think mercury poisoning symptoms quite fit. Could there be another "something metallic" that produces similar symptoms?

And getting married as a way of dealing with her parents -- aie!

"Mom, Dad -- Clark and I got married tonight."
"WHAT??? Baby, you're not... Are you pregnant?"
"No, actually, I've been poisoned."

I've been wise-cracking my way through most of these sections (I think it's called distancing <g> ) but... just can't do that here.

That shaky, teary hug... still, I was holding it together until this part:



That's just... so mundane and so filled with meaning and so *sad*...

But now I mostly want to see the next section to get Clark's reaction <g>

PJ

This story makes me want to bawl like a baby. Completely heartbreaking, Lois talking about the end, telling Clark not to let her parents take over... Ouch, my heart is in serious pain here.

A little bit of happiness over the thought of the two of them getting married, but under the circumstances...

*whimper* really is the right word.

So sad I can just imagine the look on Clark's face at that one please post more soon

That just makes me laugh. Given the dire circumstances our heroine is facing, this response is hardly appropriate, but that hasn't stopped me yet.

Awwww.

I could say I was shocked, but that would be a lie.

So sad yet so sweet.

Like this part.

Oh the angst!

*sob*

As if it weren't getting bad enough...Oh wait, there's still more.

And if that doesn't say it all.

Wendy, you did it. You broke my heart. /me faints dead away...

If this were the next-to-last post, I'd expect the blood test in Vegas to show something the doctors in Metropolis had missed, and she gets an antidote (probably something mundane, like a chocolate sundae) just in time.

But that would be too easy, too quick, too not-heart-rending, so there's no way that's going to happen.

Wow! I'm glad I'm not Clark right now.

And since I know some in-laws who are a bit like the Lanes, I sympathize with Lois's desire to leave them a note saying, "Sorry, I'm dead. Be nice to Clark. He's your new son-in-law." What a hand grenade that would be!

Wendy, I have been waiting impatiently for this installment, and I have to say that I'm impressed. A great piece of writing! I fell apart when Clark started to cry. I think they hugged to affirm life and comfort them both. It was an attempt to hold on to each other for dear life.

I can't wait to read the next piece!! Please, pretty please with a cherry on top, post soon!!


(One note, though: your "lab testers" are histologists. )

Wendy, you are killing me here! I don't post often, but I have to say this is one of THE most gut-wrenching stories I have ever read. You weren't kidding when you say your fans eat angst for breakfast! I have to go get a new box of kleenexes now.

Marcy

SOOOOOOO SAD! How can you do this to them???

The suspense is killing me here and when Clark broke down??? WOW

And Lois proposing???? My God! MORE!

Oh Wendy...this has to be one of the sadest parts yet. i just love that Lois and Clark are coming together an inch at a time each part you post. And now you have Lois asking clark to marry her...Ah! I may need another box of tissues. Please more and soon!!!!

Wow! Well another dead end, but then I can't complain what with Lois proposing and all

And loved Lois' contemplation especially her wanting to reaffirm her connection with Clark with the manila folder.

What can I say but yes, yes, yes, I agree with everybody? Except possibly with anyone who doesn't want Lois and Clark to get married under the circumstances. Of course they should get married, and although it's an absolutely heartbreaking scene it's still one of the loveliest proposals I have come across in LC fanfiction. Lois means it. She is *not* just trying to get away from her parents. And if you cure her, Wendy - *when* you cure her, I mean - Lois won't regret being married for a second. Well, assuming Clark is willing to do his part to see to it that they get married, and assuming Lois is still sufficiently alert to know what to say when the minister asks her the question...

Ann

Just wanted to clarify that if someone doesn't want L&C to get married under the circumstances, that person isn't me. I, for one, am happy that Lois proposed and am sure that she truly wants to marry Clark. I just meant that the happiness over it isn't encompassing me at the moment, because I'm still too heartbroken about her illness and the situation they're in.

If you didn't already know, Wendy, I can't wait for the next chapter. This is really masterful writing.

That's it. I've just fallen apart. That's all I've got. I'm broken. I can't even sign my name.

Wow...I never saw that coming! I'm intrigued by the possibilities of his answer. Under normal circumstances, he'd say no. But feeling like they're running out of time, willing to do anything to provide her with some comfort...hmmm. Of course, a quicker way to solve her stated problem would be to have Clark quickly write up a living will and get Lois to a notary.

A serious note to any readers out there: I know nobody likes to think about it, but it's important to have a will (or living trust) and a living will. What would happen if you were fatally injured by a drunk driver on New Year's eve? Have you provided a potential guardian for your children? Would your doctors know your wishes for medical care? There's software available to help you fill out the paperwork - a few hours of your time today could be very valuable in the event of a tragic accident tomorrow.
Susan

Wow talk about a roller coaster of emotion. They have five hours to fit in a life time of love! Maybe they'll get hit by lightning on the way and Lois will get Superpowers and the poison will be gone. OY! More soon. Laura

Jose

Owww... I need to give vent to my sorrow.

I'm broken to pieces.

There're 5 hours left to Lois and 4 parts to the story. I bet you're gonna let her (and us) on the rack until last part, aren't you? As ever, you gave us a silver lining in the end, but I'm sure you are scheming other heartbreaking twist. I can feel it. You're sadist and I'm masochist, because I keep reading and wrecking my heart.

I can't write any longer. My nerves are shattered. /me runs out to cry...

Andreia