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Davey!!! Darling!!

Have I told you that I love you? Have I told you that I absolutely LOVE this story? This premise? The writing? Well, it's amazing. All of it. What an awesome idea to have Clark with amnesia... and "remember" that Lois is his wife. Pure genius, I tell you! )

I really love this. It's so... well, I'm getting claustrophobic just thinking about it. And that "wondered again"... he's wondered more than once already, and that's just... sad.

Awesome characterization right there. Yeah, Clark lies to him all the time, but he never really was comfortable with it. It's just who he is. Irony at it's best.

Okay, I think I'm all done now...

I did mention that I love this story, right? That this premise is the most intriguing, heartbreaking, wonderful idea ever? That you're brilliant at evoking emotions from your readers?



Sara

Excellent start! I am fascinated, intrigued, and dying for more.

When will that happen? Hmm?

Wow! Superb & Magnificent!

Premise of Clark's remembering only dreams and aligning everything else to those beliefs.... gives a whole new meaning to living in a fantasy world.

Though Clark has to hurry up with coming to terms... right?

Looking forward to this story,
~Ankit.

Powerful, wonderful stuff, Dave. A great twist on ASU -- and you're making me jealous, 'cause you're so darned good at this. You're gonna make me look bad

PJ

This is such a fascinating premise, and I am thoroughly hooked! You won't believe how eager I am to see the next part. Totally loving this so far.

Yes, I agree with all that the others said before.
Really great premise. I love it. Don't worry, you definitely made justice to the teaser trailer.

Interesting twist on ASU.

To have Clark's 'dreams' intrude on his attempt to recapture his memories is quite novel, though I'm not sure why the nightmare of having Lois being pregnant would slip in there. I would think that only the happy fantasies would be the ones he 'remembered'.

Of course, there is his affair with Cat .

Looking forward to more.

Tank (who wonders if David will find a way to make Lois feel that she has to 'humour' Clark and is forced to play along with his married fantasy)

Wow!

Uh....

Wow!

Irene
who thinks she should just cut and paste Sara's post because there is no way that she can be that coherent!

Ok, I'm sending Wendy my grocery bill, must I send you one? I promise it wont be pretty.

Wow, Dave! I love this!!

The idea that he's basing his current beliefs on memories which are only dreams is fascinating. He can't remember anything about who he is, but those dreams were so important to him, and he wanted that reality so much, that they are what he remembers. And he remembers them as vividly as if they were real - again, wow!

I can't wait until Lois tumbles to the fact that he thinks they're married. I anticipate

And that instant when they arrived in the newsroom - that was all unfiltered super stuff, wasn't it? The lights, noise, his "feeling" that he could sense her heartbeat... he spent his youth learning to control those things, and so some of that control would be second nature most of the time. But not always, like if there's a lot of unexpected simultaneous stimuli... like, say, in a noisy newsroom.

More soon?? Pretty please??

~Toc

ASU rewrites - my favourite! And I love this one, Dave. Especially all the little details you've used to illustrate Clark's confusion and emotions. The scene at the police station with the claustrophobia, the emotions that Lois sparks in him and his misinterpretation of them, the confusing kicking in of his powers and his subconscious, automatic correction of them, that Janet's already mentioned.

Wonderfully observed.

Poor Clark.

Or should that be - poor Lois

Keen to find out what happens next, so post soon, you hear!

LabRat

PS - Forgot - love the title!

WOW!!! What a great idea! I love it!

Jackie

NO NO NO!!!!!

David, your slipping over to the dark side! What dark side you ask? It's called We Who Torture Clark Kent For FUN or WWTCKFF, for short!!!

Come back to the WAFFY side!


James, who will be looking forward to the next section, come what may.

Yeah, Dave!! I'm so happy you posted this.

Great description!
Beautiful. Simply beautiful.
Well, not quite, buddy.
Quite the imagination there, Clark

Even now...

And well she SHOULD be embarassed!
I love this line!


Fabulous. Despite the fact that I was anticipating this, it is still a marvelous twist. Who indeed?
You really have thought of all the details, haven't you!

Haha!

You do a great job with these little moments, Dave.

You do realize that I will now hound you mercilessly until you finish?

Woot!! I hope you have a long buffer

Jose

WOW more soon Pleeeeeeeeeease

Just so, so good.

It's no wonder that in a few short hours your comment folder is filling to overflowing, Dave. Everyone's trying to do justice to such evocative, poignant, layered writing. You don't waste words - every single word in there performs a function, sometimes several functions. Meaning upon meaning.

You get inside the head of a confused, lost and lonely soul so well. You make me feel that I'm in that holding room with Clark, pacing the floor with him, feeling the walls closing in on us, helplessly searching for any clues as to who we are.

And this para is simply amazing, vivid in its intensity and truth:

We know exactly what he's remembering, but you've done this so well that it could easily just be the troubled, panicky flashes inside the mind of someone who can't remember a thing about who he is. Especially when it's followed by this:

/me hangs up her keyboard.

Then there's the Big Misunderstanding. He remembers Lois, but his fantasies are mingled with his memories in such a way that he doesn't know which is which. As Janet pointed out, he's spent years compartmentalising himself. Learning to separate out two parts of himself - some of that is still there, still instinctive, but some of the conscious effort is forgotten, and he can't separate wishful thinking from the real thing. This is a really difficult idea to pull off, but you've written inside Clark's head so well, pulled out the real events so nicely and shown them in a different context, that it works.

Then you use the real event - Cat taking advantage of Clark's amnesia - to plant a horrible suspicion in his mind, using real memories - him in Cat's apartment, Lois's obvious resentment - and your own story - Lois awkward about holding his hand - to make this work too. So clever.

And all told with such deft skill in the writing, and such a feel for the characters, too. Lois planting an imprint on his soul. Yes. That is exactly what she did - right from the second he met her. You really do get it.

And I'm so envious.


Wendy

First, this looks like it's going to be an interesting story. Very original, which I love. The feelings Clark was going through while talking to Cat... wow.

However, it must have been too long since I've watch LnC, because I couldn't figure out what was going on for the longest time. I knew Clark had amnesia, but I couldn't figure out where all the wife, baby, Dr. visit stuff came from. I finally assumed he must have dreamed that stuff at one point.

Now, based on what other people are saying in the feedback folder, I'm getting the impression that these dreams were actually shown on an episode. I just can't remember any of the dreams or what episode they were from.

So, it took me a while to get into the story because of that. Also, I wondered why Clark hasn't asked her about the baby yet. Or made some comment about it. When my wife was pregnant, I was constantly asking her if she was all right, which drove her nuts. Even right after we first found out. One of those wierd, over protective man things I guess. She set me straight pretty early. Anyway... it seemed strange that Clark hasn't let on at least a little bit about some of these thought to Lois - which would freak her out I'm sure.

Looking forward to said freaking out time...

I can't wait until Lois finds out what Clark believes.

gerry

Jeff, I don't think the dreams per se were shown on the show... certainly don't remember any first season love-making scenes between L&C! I think Clark's taking some real memories -- kissing Lois in the plane (SV) and in the hotel (HiM), and being at Cat's place (SV) and mixing them up with his wishful thinking. I can imagine him lying in bed at night, planning how he'd like things to be... It's quite the fantasy life he's got going, there, though I think it's very sweet that in his fantasies, he's getting married and having kids.

"You don't know how many times I've thought about this... dreamt about this... well, something like this..."

PJ