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Feedback is definitely appreciated, especially on the intentional typos. Should I keep all of them in or fix a couple?
I believe there's a hero in all of us that keeps us honest, gives us strength, makes us noble, and finally allows us to die with pride, even though sometimes we have to be steady and give up the thing we want the most. Even our dreams. -- Aunt May, Spider-Man 2
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Hi, Cute story. 
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Cute story.  No one will believe him after that.  Kent did his best to look like he was paying attention, but his attention wanders to Lois, who was the love of his life. They were going to get married someday, he just knew it. Was this slip deliberate? I love it. Ines 
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Was this slip deliberate? I love it Lol, no. I'll have to fix that one.
I believe there's a hero in all of us that keeps us honest, gives us strength, makes us noble, and finally allows us to die with pride, even though sometimes we have to be steady and give up the thing we want the most. Even our dreams. -- Aunt May, Spider-Man 2
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Very cute, in a horribly bad way  Kind of a shame she didn't get the clue, though... when this Lois *does* find out CK=S, she's gonna be kicking herself! PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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AAAAAAARGH! Lois is galactically stupid!!! I really thought she would be getting the hint. Great story, Emily!  I love it!! Any chance of a third 'part'? Please? See ya, AnnaBtG.
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LOL, Emily! And such a great revelation... even though it wasn't! As Anna so succinctly put it, Aaaaaaaaaaaaaargh! - Vicki PS - in answer to your question, keep all the typos.
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ROFL, Emily!! Terrific job! Yes, do leave the typos in - actually, I almost expected more, and more tense switches, homophones, misplaced apostrophes and so on. But nice work!!  Wendy
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Come on!! :rolleyes: How can't she see it?!!!  Jose
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Emily This is great. LOL! I thoroughly enjoyed it. Tricia 
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I love it, Em!!!
Don't change the "Lois" typo--I think it's brilliant! *grin*
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Thanks. I kept the Lois typo. I might use it in a sequel. After all, Lois should eventually figure out my/Clark's Fredudian slip.
I believe there's a hero in all of us that keeps us honest, gives us strength, makes us noble, and finally allows us to die with pride, even though sometimes we have to be steady and give up the thing we want the most. Even our dreams. -- Aunt May, Spider-Man 2
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