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Aww, that was nice, if ultimately disappointing... but then, I want every fic to end with "happily ever after" <g> Anyway, I read your note at the beginning and was a little worried that this might be really silly/sappy/bad... but you did a great job with it. I loved seeing Clark making those little slips, and it's so Lois to have them go straight over her head. The whole thing flowed well -- there weren't any moments when it sounded forced. So... nice job!  PJ who is up past her bedtime and fears she may not be quite coherent...
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
--Stardust, Caroline K
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Nice job but no way can this end here! get back here and write the rest of the story! Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
Caroline's "Stardust"
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 You already know I like this story! I think it's great how you got all those song titles into the story and still kept it so coherent! I love it! - Laura
Laura "The Yellow Dart" U. (Alicia U. on the archive)
"A hero is an ordinary individual who finds the strength to persevere and endure in spite of overwhelming obstacles." -- Christopher Reeve
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Anna You did a great job incorporating all those song titles.  Tricia 
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I'll be back to write a 'detailed' thank you later, now I'm just here for a minute.
I wanted to apologize to Laura and let you all know that there's some credit going to her too, because she BRed this story very efficiently and when I posted I forgot to mention her. (I'm going right there to edit it.) Sorry, Laura! I hope you didn't think I didn't appreciate your help.
Thank you Pam, Laura's and Tricia for your nice comments.
See ya,
AnnaBtG.
What we've got here is failure to communicate...
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Awww! Very bittersweet, Anna. Loved Clark the romantic, and Lois the cynic... poor guy! Wendy
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Anna,
This was great. So clever and really fun.
And I'm so impressed with how easily you worked the song titles in.
CC
You mean we're supposed to have lives?
Oh crap!
~Tank
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Nice story!! Jose
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Nice job! You did a great job of weaving in the song titles. Not blatent or obvious; the titles felt like natural dialogue. I, too, was hoping for a happily ever after ending (or at least a kiss ) but this makes for a nice "in between" scene that stays within continuity. Kathy
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Well done!  I really enjoyed this cute little story. Please write more! Ines
"It is our choices, that show what we truly are, far more than our abilities." (Albus Dumbledore, CoS)
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As I promised, I'm back And, to be honest, quite surprised I got all this feedback. Not used to it I'm very glad you liked it - especially because, if it wasn't for this sudden inspiration to check if I had anything unfinished, it would still be sitting half-ready in my hard drive. Thank you for your wonderful feedback, Pam, Laura's and Tricia (again), Wendy, CC, Jose, Kathy and Ines Also thanks to everyone who happened to read it, even if you didn't comment. See ya soon. AnnaBtG.
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Hi, Cute story .
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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