Who's the master of disguise here? Is it Lois, whom the public knows as Mrs. Luthor but who in reality is a mad dog journalist, or is it Clark, who in reality is the slow-on-the-uptake Superman? Or is it both of them?
Having Lois perceive Superman as being dense both physically and mentally is brilliant. It gives her a legit reason not to connect the sharp journalist with the slightly dull superhero. And Lois thinking that Clark has better hair than Superman is also brilliant. Not only does it put another degree of separation between the two men in her mind, it means that she's not going to be overwhelmed by the spandex and muscles.
I was a little surprised that Superman - who knew that Trask had a chunk of green K with him - would plan to storm in on the bad guys without doing any visual search first. Of course, it reinforces Lois' impression that he's not the sharpest pencil in the drawer, so maybe that's a good thing (from Clark's point of view). Of course, when Lois does find out the truth, she's going to be quite put out.
Speaking of Lois, you've left her in Clark's closet. Is his apartment in Frisco like the one he had in Metropolis in the show, with his suits in the secret compartment? This situation gives the phrase "coming out of the closet" a whole new meaning.
Still reading and still enjoying the first-person present tense. Even when Lois slipped and thought she was falling to her death, the tension felt real and the narrative rang true. The story is moving along at a good pace, the characterizations are right on target, Lois' internal dialogue is priceless, and I am more than ready for the next installment! Bring it on!
