I like the premise of the story.
I am guessing our mystery guest is Santa *ho ho ho*, but I'm intrigued as to what the object he gave Lois for Clark is.
The dialogue between Lois and Clark often read a bit 'stiff' or 'fake' to me... it doesn't quite feel natural or flowing, although I did like the way you made Lois react to Clark and his 'stiff' issues.
Not sure about Clark's falling straight back asleep though... mind you... he is a man.... so.... it is somewhat believable.
Curious to read the next part of this story and see how it unravels.
