Awww... Send story over here. DS is sleeping [I think] at the moment and I have plenty of time to give her lots of lovely feedback and take care of her so you can get the things done that you need to do so you can get 45 polished for tonight. Or if you're sure you won't have time, I'd be happy to go over it a few times for you... Of course, I'd need the rest of it too to make sure there's no continuity errors etc.
Seriously. I'd be happy to help you out.
Carol
