First off: Your writing is wonderful! You drew me in, captured me and didn't let go till the end of the part. *nods*
The story you tell, the points of view you give... it all fits. The reader (me) understands exactly where Clark is coming from, while at the same time yelling at Clark mutely in my head: "Nooo! You stupid! Not gonna work! Gah!"
I am really curious where you will take this. Very curious about Lois' reaction to Superman's retirement, to finding about Clark's secret (cause I'm convinced that she will figure it out sooner than later...), and so on.
Don't keep us waiting too long.
Sira.
