Guess I should rewrite my comments reply. Too bad I didn't save a copy of the first one.
Oh well. Just gives me an excuse to go back over all that FDK.
So... thanks for the comments, everyone!
Glad you guys enjoyed the story.
I got that warm, cuddly feeling of comfort from Jordan's thinking scene.
Very glad to hear that, Sara. I was a little worried about this story, because it felt kind of bare-bones to me. Sketched out. It had some themes and meaning and stuff to it (a first for me!), but it was light on detail. So, while I'm always happy to hear that a story of mine pulled you in, I'm especially happy to hear it this time.
I've seen some other stories where kids are asked to write about their heroes. This is evidently something that is done in school, but somehow I don't ever remember doing that. Weird, huh?
Truth to tell, I don't recall doing that, either. Maybe it's something that only happens in fictional universes. In any case, it's what makes the story work, so that's what's important to me.
You took a mundane bit of cannon, then gave us insight into why it is, and so gave us more insight into the characters themselves.
Thanks, Carol! And yay! You noticed the cooking theme!
Nothing overstated, just really very good.
This was lovely. Waffy without being sickening sweet and very insightful.
Thanks! That's exactly what I was hoping for.
I also liked that Lois chose to write about herself. It so fits her, and it's true in every sense of the word, considering her dysfuntional family.
Yes! For me, that was the whole point of the story. Jordan's bookends allowed me to add a bit more, but the central moment, for me, was Lois's choice.
Also, a few of you pointed out that Jordan and Clark both chose their respective mothers. This is true, but it's only part of it.
Clark's hero was, "
my mother, Martha Kent."
Lois's hero was, "myself,
Lois Lane."
Jordan's was, "
my mother,
Lois Lane."
Jordan is what every child is - a new whole made up from parts of what came before. It's true of his choice of hero, it's true of his name ("Jordan Elliot" draws elements from all 3 sets of grandparents - Jor-El, Jonathan, and Ellen), and it's true of his reaction to the crowd (Clark's shyness, Lois's fierce temper, and then something uniquely his: a blend of Clark's geniality with Lois's confidence).
Please Paul, may we have many more stories from you.
Aww, shucks.
Unfortunately, the reason I've only written two stories (counting my DVD fic) in the past couple of years is not that I chose to retire or to work on writing something else. I seem to have run out of ideas, or the ability to flesh out old ones (I've got a folder that's been gathering virtual dust for
years...). Thanks, though.
Thanks again to everyone who commented. Having been out of the game so long, it's really good to come back to such a warm reception.
Paul
