According to my source, tricyclic anti-depressants are a favored way of committing suicide. They cause cardiac suppression leading to cardiac failure.
Oh, wow. Who knew?
I stand corrected.
As to Martha & Jonathan walking in - I have to re-think that part. Expect revisions.
Don't feel you need to if you like it as is; it's your story.
I would be welcome to revisions, though, if you write them. Actually, I see you've ammended it. And can I just say that this line kills me:
“We flew in a day early,” Jonathan said. “So we could spend some time with him. He was sounding so odd the last time we talked to him, we got worried.”
This both fixes my concern and breaks my heart!
Just a little line, but it adds so much, I think.
I forgot to mention earlier in all my babbling that there were quite a few touching lines in this story. Maria pointed one out - the ending. I quite liked how Henderson and Perry saw fit to still conceal Clark's identity. I also really liked that Clark was found with Lois's bear. So sad.
Thanks for writing!
Sara
