Hmm, I don't know why people aren't commenting on this, Tayryn. Perhaps they find it just a little steamier than they expected. Now me, I've been waiting for Clark/Superman and Lois to get together since 1969, and I'm a bit tired of seeing them beating around the bush. Don't get me wrong - there are so many absolutely brilliant stories posted here in the gfic folder where Lois and Clark never progress past kissing, and I wouldn't have missed those stories for the world. But also make no mistake, I do like to see them taking their relationship further.
And as for your story, I got the feeling that seduction, desire and longing just took over and carried Lois and Clark along. And that's another thing I really love to see: love inexorably taking over, leading to lovemaking, and leaving Lois and Clark to deal with possible consequences afterwards. Or, just generally, forcing them to contemplate their new situation as lovers and forcing them to make decisions about the future.
I love the strong sense of physical desire and longing that just carried Lois and Clark away in your story. I love the seduction, in other words. This sentence, by the way, is one I adore:
"I'm going to make you shatter in my arms at least once before I lay you down on your bed and start all over again." Clark replied.
Oh, wow, Tayryn. "I'm going to make you shatter in my arms..." And then he's going to "lay you down on your bed and start all over again..." What an exquisite, wonderful promise that was. And I'm sure he kept it, too.
If there is anything more I could have asked for in your story, I guess it might have been a bit more of "surveying the new landscape afterwards", if you get what I mean. Their night of lovemaking was so wonderful - what will the morning be like?
Please don't take this as any sort of criticism! On the contrary, I'm so grateful to you for giving the PG folder this piece of lovely eroticism. But I guess I'm really asking for a sequel. I'd really like to know a little about what happened to Lois and Clark afterwards!
In other words, welcome back with more stories!
Ann
