Hey Paul - great job on that story. (both the story and the audio file!) You've got a pleasant voice for this, I had a good time listening.
I also think audiofic is a really neat idea and I hope there's more of it in the future!
(and I can't figure out a way to say this without sounding like I'm showing off or something - which is definitely not how I want to come off! - but here goes anyway... I may have a few tips and tricks as far as reading a story goes, if anyone is interested. Someone with acting classes would probably know a lot better than I do, but I studied radio broadcasting and have had voice coaching all through College, so I do know a few useful little things.)