"From the first sentence: "Clark's eyes wandered around the empty newsroom." NO, NO, NO! Eyes do not wander. They stay put. <g> The gaze wanders."
I'm going completely off topic
But is it just me, or does that comment seem nitpicky and obnoxious? (I
don't mean that the judge is being obnoxious, I just mean that it's a comment I've been given before and I never feel it's really valid.) No, eyes do not actually wander, but this is hardly the only time we don't write exactly what we mean. The reader knows what is happening and somehow "gaze wandered" never sounds as nice to me. I know, that's completely subjective, but having it corrected all the time does get on my nerves
Is it just me?
Kaylle
