LOL, Alicia - nice touch. And very well done!

LabRat

Alicia

WOW! This is wonderful.

You did a fantastic job portraying Lois's emotions.

And Lois's haircut, LOL!
Saves having to decide what style you want!

Thanks for sharing this lovely story.

Tricia

Alicia, an interesting take, cleverly done.

I liked Lois' chaotic thought processes as she became conscious of her dilemma.

Clark hesitancy to 'explain' his rescue technique was also quite funny.

Well done.

Tank (who has experienced his own canoe travals in the past and is glad that Alicia is well and still with us)

Great work, Alicia! I loved Lois not remembering that she knew Clark was Superman - and Clark's response to it!

And what an ingenious way to give her a haircut!

Good story.

If you wanted to meet the deathfic challenge (which allows resurrection), maybe you could have had her drown, only to be brought back by CPR. It worked for Buffy, the Vampire Slayer, sufficiently to invoke a new Slayer. That way, Lois wouldn't stay dead.

LOL at Clark's sheer panic at the thought of Lois forgetting things *again*!

Nice one, Alicia!

Hazel

Thank you, LabRat, Tricia, Tank, Wendy, me and Hazel . I am so glad you all liked it.

me said:
I've never actually watched Buffy the Vampire Slayer - nor do I really want to. I really have no idea what you're talking about. I have a hard time with death, so I don't want to kill Lois even if she will be resurrected. Sorry!

Hazel said:
Oh you're right. I changed the ending to make that more clear . Definately it was the length rather than the style.
- Alicia
who after a couple of broken ribs and a bad case of pnemonia and pain for weeks is never going canoeing again

Alicia, this was great! What a way to get a haircut. LOL!

Ursie

This is what I get for not reading beyond Tank's fic.

Very very good. It answers to challenge perfectly as well.

A fic doesn't have to necessarily kill of a character to answer the challenge. If it's suffiently dark enough as this story was then it'll be enough for me.

That said a little bit more death and mayhem wouldn't hurt.

Very clever, Alicia! I was all ready to suggest you label the story -- either in the title line or in an opening author's note -- as to which challenge this was from (I avoid dark/deathfics like the plague) but I can see from how it ends that you wouldn't want to do that. You did a great job of combining the two challenges!

Lois's fear was presented really well, as was the "non" revelation and then the haircut ... it was great to have a "darkfic" end on such a happy note.

Thanks for posting this!

Kathy

You sure had me worried for a while there... thanks for including that setence at the top about this having a happy ending. At one point, I was wondering if Lois was going to wake up to realize it was just a nightmare...

Loved the (non)revelation <g> And Clark is so cute.

PJ

Alicia
ditto others
very nicely done
merry

Thanks, Ursie, Juliet, Kathy, Pam, and Merry .

Thanks, Ursie - I was trying to be original.

Thanks, Juliet, I aim to please... even though I have trouble killing characters, I am glad it was sufficiently dark .

I really debated putting a warning on the story initially, but I rationalized that since it had a happy ending, it probably didn't need one. My argument was going to be that I never let my characters die, but I remembered that in one of my fics I had Sam Lane die, so that was definately flawed logic .

I do too... but then again I am being hypocritical because I don't read them, but I wrote this story and the story I mentioned before.

Thank you so much, Kathy, Pam, and Merry! I am glad you liked the non Revalation - I actually wrote that first then I added the rest of the story .

- Alicia

Clark's reaction to the non-revelation

Thanks, HC! I am so glad you enjoyed it .

- Alicia

Hey Alicia!