FDK: An Apology - 09/10/08 01:35 PM
Hi Manda!
This was a great piece of short fluff. And are you sure you don't want to continue this in a dark place?
Okay, I could quote this line by line, but I'm writing Fury-ously right now and just thought I'd take a moment and honor this story of yours.
When I started reading I had no idea which season it was or what the offense was. And you built the suspense magnificently.
Then came this:
and I choked.
I could so totally see this.
Actually, I overlooked the rolling hand at first and still imaged Lois doing just that :p
And you followed up with this:
Until the last sentence totally fried my brain.
So, what does it take for you to make this into a longer story with a build up and a finish. You know, over on the other side?
Michael
This was a great piece of short fluff. And are you sure you don't want to continue this in a dark place?
Okay, I could quote this line by line, but I'm writing Fury-ously right now and just thought I'd take a moment and honor this story of yours.
When I started reading I had no idea which season it was or what the offense was. And you built the suspense magnificently.
Then came this:
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"I, Clark Kent, am sorry that I...*sigh*...that I openly gawked at your breasts! It was insensitive of me, and I apologize."
I could so totally see this.
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She raised her eyebrows and rolled her hand signaling for him to continue. She was so not going to give him a break on this.
And you followed up with this:
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It just proves that I am just another pig-headed jerk, and thus not worthy to even be near someone as truly great as the famed Lois Lane." He finished with a defeated sigh.
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"Admitting it is the first step." She said, then in a tone that he was sure she thought he couldn't hear. "Now all I need is for you to learn how to be assertive and take charge of what you want."
So, what does it take for you to make this into a longer story with a build up and a finish. You know, over on the other side? Michael
Hi!