I think I'll forgo quoting and just link to the story
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The next part was posted in response to reading pt 4 with my brain lacking sleep. So just ignore it, our have fun reading the ramblings of a madman...
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A couple of observations:
- In the opening lines, Jon was 6 and Ellie seemed to understand to not make a fuzz, so she should have been somewhere around three. That makes Jon 19-20, while Kaylie is already teaching, and not just at your run of the mill high school. So, how old is she? 23?
- Ellie has been flying since she was 14-15? Going on patrol with her Dad since well before her 16th birthday? How did she manage that with overprotective Clark?
- So now to the jucy parts. Kaylie has a thing tomorrow. Jon attends Ellie's birthday party tomorrow. So why are they going to end up the same event?
a) An 18 year old Kaylie was babysitting an 11 year old Ellie, while a 14 year old Jon went out with his friends. Problem: did he really never meet his kid-sisters baby-sitter?
b) Ellie managed to get herself into kaylie's class, the little pyro
Problem: She is Clark's daughter so that won't fly.
c) Kaylie is teaching some other classes as well, and Ellie knows her that way. Problem: has Kaylie really so much spare time or so much need for money?
d) Batgirl (or what-ever) is doing special appearances at teenage girl birthdays just for the fun of it. Problem: don't see that happening.
Ok, I'm stumped. I only know, that tomorrow Jon will be in civies and Kaylie might be or not when they attend Ellie's birthday.
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Waiting for tomorrow (At least story-wise
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Michael