Feedback for number 9.

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The description in the beginning chilled me to the bone just thinking about it! This was wonderfully written. I certainly felt Lois' panic and desperation. I was getting nervous sitting here thinking WHERE IS SUPERMAN? WHERE IS HE, DANGIT!? And then the end was just perfect. Sweet and just... *sigh* Great job.

Laura

What a sweet ending! Great story, whoever you are (I'm REALLY bad at this game!).

One thing that struck me here was the beautiful writing style. This piece was written by someone who is very much in control of her writing skills. Yes, I say her writing skills, because it seemes obvious to me that this was written by a woman.

The story was quite carefully constructed, too. In the end Lois tells Superman to take her to Clark. We are left to guess what will happen, but I think that Superman will fly her to Clark's apartment and probably change into Clark before her eyes. Or maybe not, if she is too tired and too much in shock. But if he won't tell her that Superman is Clark Kent that night, I really think he will tell her in the morning. (Because surely she will spend the night in Clark's apartment, sleeping soundly in Clark's bed, with Clark either on his couch or very chastely in bed with her.)

Beautiful piece. For some reason, I keep thinking that it was written by DJ.

Ann

Wonderful story, really. At first, I thought I might end up reading a deathfic, but fortunately it wasn't. But it sure scared me, seeing Lois nearly drown.

But the best of all was the ending, true. Right now, I'm near to melting into a puddle. Hmmm.

As to who the author is.. I don't really know. Even though there was one mistake ('site' instead of 'sight') in there that looks like one of Nancy's trademarks, I don't think this is hers. But the whole way Lois feelings are described... Bakasi, might that be yours?

Really? Oooh! *laughs wickedly*

This was just... OMG. completely, absolutely amazing and wonderful and... awwww!!!

My jaw dropped to the keyboard a few times throughout -- did you hear it? My coworkers did!

I'm blown away. And I'm pretty sure I know who wrote this, too.

Wow that was great.

It sorta followed the theme. She did have that fun daydream about using the cape at the Halloween party. lol

You guys and your open endings are killing me though.

But I adored this story and I adored the writing style. I have a guess for this one as well... but like I said I think I've already looked foolish enough with my silly guesses. haha

There's one person who consistently makes my jaw drop and then makes me vow never to write another word because it's pointless when perfection has just been obtained.

Caroline.

If it's not her, I just found someone else to build an altar to and worship.

ETA: Just reread it and I have one other possibility. Caroline doesn't put a space on the end of her elipses, so either she's faking me out or alcyone wrote this.

See! This is why I stopped guessing! I know I'm going to be wrong.

Whomever you are - you're amazing.

I got it...well I think I do. It's very intense, very detailed and very _direct_.

The last (how direct the writing is) I think is key. The first two can easily throw us off. I don't think it's Caroline, though the detail can lead us to think so. I'd be very surprised.

I think. Great story. I'm always a sucker for details n' drama.

alcyone

Wow! I admit to also thinking this was a deathfic. i agree that my guess is a woman wrote this and a woman who sure knows how to create a very real scene. Great writing job and aww the last line! I hope that maybe when this contest is over, the author might just think to continue this perhaps even an n-fic tidbit?

Mona

This reminds me of Tank, Wendy or Sue. I'm going out on a limb and saying Wendy, even knowing that she writes for the good Dr. these days.

What a poignantly touching, thrillingly scary piece.

Elisabeth

Elisabeth suggested reading these things to take my mind off RL for a while.

Since we just recently had Nan writing of Lois's near deadly experiance with cold water in Second Choices, ah think this is Nan's work.

James

That was such a suspenseful story. My toes are freezing now!

And I've pretty much given up on trying to guess for now too. I'm too busy just trying to keep up with all of these stories. Whoever did write this...you did an awesome job!