Well, what do you think? I've been flattered and grateful for the feedback so far.

Yes!

Hmm, Time for Superman!

Getting complicated!

As usual, Shayne, your storytelling is outstanding. keep it coming!

Nan

Shayne, I adore this story. I can't even say more than that, except that I'm really curious to see where you're going from here. You're doing a lovely job; I'll definitely be sticking around for the ride.

Kaylle

It's great, mystifying and intriguing. And it leaves me with a pit in my stomach.

Ann

So, this Lois doesn't know that CK will be/was/is Superman but she knows both die.

I have the feeling I keep repeating myself, but it might be because you keep surprising me... I didn't think Clark would stay through her whole 'I'm from the future' explanation.

I'm really dying to see where you're going with this. Great story

Lois doesn't know Clark is Superman? That took me by surprise. I thought she knew

And I love it, at the end, when she starts telling Clark about Superman. She doesn't know who she is talking to, but for Clark, that would be quite a story to hear! ooh!

I love the way you write Shayne. Your storytelling made the scenes very vivid. It's as if I was watching a movie.

I'm hooked. Please, post more soon.

This is fabulous. Please post more, quickly. I have no idea where this is going, but I'm sure enjoying the ride -- in a nail-biting kind of way.

PJ

Another excellant instalment.

It's fun to watch this unfold as Lois continues to screw-up the future. Considering how many different ways there are for this plot line to go, your path is always both logical, yet continues to give us surprises along the way.

As things get more desperate, and this new Lois' life continues to spiral out of her control, I can almost see this world turning into that fear-wracked one that the alt-Clark lived in before Lois came and created their Superman.

Looking forward to more.

Tank (who reminds Shayne that, since he'll be out of town for a while, the next instalment should wait until at least Sunday to post... the gentle readers won't mind the wait)

Grrr! Maybe some of us aren't so gentle, Tank! More! More! More!

Seriously, this is an excellent story. You keep surprising me, too. And Clark's bewilderment at Lois's facility in Aunt Opal's house has got to make him accept at least part of her wild tale.

I wonder just how badly her younger self has messed up. Her current situaiton makes me wonder if there might be a drug deal lurking in the background somewhere, or maybe young Lois is running an illegal poker tournament and raking in even more money.

Since she apparently has the older Lois's event memories, why doesn't she realize how stupid it is to put gambling winnings in an interest-bearing account? That's like sending up a flare to the IRS and yelling out "I have money! Come get some of it!" But it does play into her younger self's immaturity and apparent belief that she's bulletproof.

And if someone's been following her bets with ten times the amount, no wonder someone else is really steamed. She may find herself in enough danger that Clark will be forced to reveal himself to her. Would she then help become Superman, or would he turn from her because he's not ready yet to be the world's protector?

Tank is right about one thing (actually, he's right about a lot of things, but this one in particular): Lois has destroyed her life as she once knew it. It's too late to fix things now. Events are spiraling out of control, and she may have precipitated a gang conflict that will turn Metropolis into a darker version of Gotham City. If all you wanted to say with this story is that we each make an impact on others just by living our lives, you've made that point.

And you've done it with such an engaging and powerful story, Shayne! I'm ready for the next chapter, and the next, and the next, until I don't even recognize the world you are so masterfully creating.

Wow, Shayne, I really enjoyed this chapter.

She's helping Luthor build his empire? How creepy is that?

Poor Lois. She's finally realizing the consequences of jumping in without testing the water level, but there's no way to go back now.

Or, is there? Can you fix this? Will you fix it, please?

Oh, and Tank ...
I'm with Terry, here. I think you should bite your tongue. I, for one, am not so patient. I can't wait to see Clark's reaction to Superman ...

Lovin' it,
BJ

Shayne - I have been remiss in not telling you how much I'm enjoying this. Of course, I read parts 4-7 today . That's my story and I'm sticking to it!

Seriously, I'm with the others in wondering why young Lois would jeoparidize the future - or does she just remember enough to pick game winners? *has flashes of Back to the Future* Does she feel that it's hopeless since she missed out on the DP? Did something happen with Grandma? Her parents? Does she remember everything older Lois does but perhaps see something more that older Lois doesn't? [Don't ask me what by the way] Older Lois doesn't remember what younger Lois is doing - maybe dad is forcing her or something? There's more to it than we think. Maybe because she lost a few days when Lois first arrived and then several more [days? weeks? I forget] when Lois writes for the Star etc. she thinks she's losing it so what does she have to lose?

Anyway, quite intruiging and I can't wait to see where it goes next!!!
Carol

Hi,

Great part!

Love it, Shayne, cant wait for more. I cant wait to see how Clark reacts to Superman either. And I'm with everyone else, I dont want to have to wait til Sunday either
Kate