FDK: Super Shook Up 2/4 - Lois & Clark Fanfic Message Boards

Haha, this is really funny so far. I'm enjoying it anyways.

I especially like Superman's reaction to the clothes and the name "Superman". I always wished they would do more with that in the TV show - I mean seriously, Clark has to have serious issues to be able to dress like that.

I guess they kind of did something in that one episode where alt-Clark worries about looking stupid in the suit, but they could have done so much more.

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But, no... seems Clark and Superman were better friends than either one of them had ever let on.

Oh, darn. You went for option number two. Ah, well, I expected it.

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No, she would have noticed that.

<snort>

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the red underwear that had... belt loops?

Still loving it, Sara!

Oh, this is such a great start! I'm just a little too brain dead to say anything else right now, but I love Clark's confusion, Lois jumping to all those conclusions about Clark and Superman hanging out...keep it up!

JD

It has to sink in at some point maybe when she tries to drag him into bed?

Patrick

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He shook his head. "This isn't a suit. This is... a Halloween costume."

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That was something he really wanted to ask her about. As soon as she finished remodeling the kitchen.

No! Ask now! Ask now! Not in the next part... now!

And "remodeling the kitchen" slayed me. Hee!

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"Did you say fly?"

Poor Clark. So adorable in his confusion.

Still loving it, Sara. Keep 'em coming!

Caroline

OMG! Clark.. erm Superman's reaction towards his suit is hilarious

Lois' matter-of-fact observations about Superman's lifestyle and his alarming bewilderment... superb

Also the photo (Clark's clue) and his towel-clad chest(Lois' clue) .. uhoh

Ooh, somebody's gonna be kicking herself later for missing all those clues... <g> There's none so blind as those who will not see, eh?

And I love that Clark immediately recognizes himself in the picture and that it tells him there's some serious emotion involved in there *somewhere* even if it's not immediately obvious. Wonder if he'll get up the nerve to ask Lois about it?

PJ

I agree with Lisa! Darn! You went for option #2 and made Lois jump to the brain-dead conclusion that Clark is just storing Superman's suits in his apartment!!! *groan*

Ann

LOL!!!!!!

I love this part of the story. Always cracks me up. Keep it up, Sara!

Rach

I love the way you're bringing them together a little bit at a time, and still maintaining a reasonable amount of misunderstanding on both sides. I think Lois will kick herself in the head when she finally does figure it out.

Of course, because she's so very good at martial arts, she'll give herself amnesia, and then you'll have your next story!

Ouf! Talk about a loaded schedule... classes, work, tutoring, homework and sometimes sleep! Sorry, guys! I really meant to post this next part sooner. And I really should be in bed right now...

So, I'm not going to respond to individual feedback except to say:

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And I love that Clark immediately recognizes himself in the picture and that it tells him there's some serious emotion involved in there *somewhere* even if it's not immediately obvious. Wonder if he'll get up the nerve to ask Lois about it?

Pam...

for the Lois kicking herself in the head and giving herself amnesia comment.

Thank you, thank you everyone! I've already read through your comments more times than I should admit to!

And now... part 3!

Sara

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Her jaw dropped and all the air disappeared from her lungs.

She...

He...

Clark that... that... fink!

She’s figured out that Clark’s sleeping with Superman!

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This was why he got all those exclusive Superman interviews! Oh, that just wasn't fair. She would have gladly offered up closet space for an interview or two.

Or her bed?
CLARK: No, she doesn’t share her bed.
LOIS: I’ll make an exception for Superman.

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Clark had a *lot* of explaining to do as soon as she found him. They were partners, for crying out loud! He couldn't have mentioned this?

CLARK: It’s called keeping a secret.
LOIS: Or treason.

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Did they talk about her? Complain about her pigheadedness and her unrelenting infatuation?

SUPERMAN: You wouldn’t be the stunt she pulled today. She was actually stuck to the side of a skyscraper when I got to her.

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And Superman... well, he was lucky he had no memory at the moment.

Right. As if she’d *ever* bet mad at him when he’s naked in front of her.

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It wasn't like she'd be letting him out anyway, not when he didn't even know who he was.

Yeah…crooks might take advantage of him…

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. And, wow, Lois had three of them! She must be quite the journalist.

Or walk over dead bodies to get them.

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Oh. Wow. It was him. And her. A candid photo, it appeared, taken in what looked to be a newsroom.

Maybe he should not mention that one to Lois.

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His eyes in the photograph...

Well, he wasn't sure he quite believed what he was seeing there. Surely, it couldn't be. Lois would have mentioned something if they'd been... were... lov--really close friends.

He’s figured out that they’re friends with benefits! Is he going to kiss her when she gets home?

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"I'm back, and I actually managed to find one of your su--" She stopped mid-sentence and mid-stride.

Ooooh! Towel-effect!

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He gestured down to the bag hanging from her arm. Clothes would be nice right now. Really nice.

SUPERMAN (some minutes later): That? I can’t wear *that*!

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*I* didn't know that before, but you have a closet and everything.

Yeah…well…he’s not come out of the closet yet.

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Not to mention her eyes kept wandering over his chest and... lower.

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Well, this costume thing couldn't be that bad, right? At least it would cover more of him.

Yes. ‘Cover’

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Red spandex briefs.

"You... uh... you wear them on the outside."

No. No way.

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Only... the tight-fitting spandex didn't leave much to the imagination. At all.

He gave the discarded towel a longing look,

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, wondering if Lois would look at him funny if he came out with the cape wrapped around him, covering his front.

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She could... say she forgot something from her room and, oops, didn't realize he'd been...

No, that was a lame excuse.

Then again, the man didn't have a memory. For all he knew, they were involved.

/heads over yonder/

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Because any minute now, Superman was going to come walking out her bedroom door and ask her--

"So, you said something about dinner?"

Oh boy.

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... to feed him.

Dang.

LOIS:

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Maybe she'd decided to cook instead?

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He didn't want her to go to any more trouble for him than she had already, especially because, now that he thought about it, he didn't feel all that hungry.

He’s remembering something!
LOIS:

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I was trying to find the menu for this place Clark always gets food from, but I guess I don't h--"

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"Did you say fly?"

Oh, so much fun!

Michael

Hee hee! Loved the reactions, Michael! Thanks for the feedback!

Sara