Say what you will, but remember it was on the spur of the moment...

Whoa, Sara! This is great!

You had me almost fooled, you know; I was reading it and thinking that it all made perfect sense for Clark to be thinking of Lois like that - her refusal to see him for who he really is, her determination to keep him only as a friend. And yet some part of me was telling me that it might not be Clark...

This shows us how right Kaethel is to argue that in many ways Lex has similarities to Superman - is this where the idea came from? They're each, in different ways, the most powerful man in Metropolis. And, yes, Lex could arrange to have her apartment cleaned for her in seconds... by sending in a maid service. And, yes, Lois moons over Superman while leaving both Lex and Clark dangling. There are some terrific parallels in here!

Excellent! And very thought-provoking, even without that classic twist at the end. I love it!


Wendy

Whoa, Sara!! Feel free to blame me for that sort of thing any time! As Wendy said it's extremely insightful and thought-provoking. And I love it that you managed to draw not only parallels between Lex and Superman, but also between Clark and Lex. Extremely well done!

Kaethel

Wonderful, Sara! We get so few introspective pieces from Lex's pov, so this was a refreshing change.

You captured him so perfectly here, his way of speaking, his thought processes, that I never thought it was Clark. You sent chills down my spine from the opening paragraphs, just in the same way that John Shea did on screen, with that chilling obsessive and twisted idea of what love is and I could hear him so clearly in my head. <shudder>

As others have said, insightful and original.

LabRat (taking a break from one superb Sara story to read another )

Wow, Sara, this was great. And that is a big compliment from me because of how much I hate Lex and refuse to read almost anything where he is a main character .

I suspected it was Lex all along from the title -- and I hate Lex -- so I am really surprised I enjoyed this story. You've captured Lex's character wonderfully. He is just so horrible, so slimey, so . . . okay I won't go on .

I hope we see more stories from you soon ,
- Laura

I'm impressed!!

Heyya Wendy, Kaethel, LabRat and Laura!

Whoa...thank you all so much! I can’t believe you all spotted this so fast...makes me feel *very* bad for my procrastinate tendencies...

Kaethel, you argue that? Wtg! But to be honest, not really, Wendy. The Clone Arc was on recently on UKGold, and as I was watching it I couldn’t help but think that Lex really *did* love Lois, as he said to Clark, regardless of how generally ick his personality was...(hey, that’s just my opinion ) and it came partly from that. But really it just hit me outta nowhere another form of procrastination as well, I was trying to come up with an excuse not to work on Unfinished Business.../me ducks and runs

Aww, thanks Kae! Yup, I had mad fun trying to put my twisted logic down on paper...<g>

I’m stuck between blushing and sighing that you seem to be the only one who escaped from the net so far...ah, lets go *blush* anyway. Thanks Labby!

Okay, I’m definitely going now...awww! Thank you!

And...hmm... ‘Sara story.’ That has a nice ring to it!

Aww, thanks Laura!

But you hate Lex? Aw, come on! I know he was a bit of a *incoherent mumble* but every show needs an evil villain and he is the one to beat all others...

Aww! Another wriggler...would you believe I got that title from a MasterCard ad? ***Cue the dancing shamrock hats...*** Deep voice: “There are some things money can’t buy. For everything else, there’s MasterCard!”

I’m trying, I’m trying hard!!!

Anyway, thanks again all and night

Sara.

Hi,

Cute story!

Thank God it was Luthor.

MAF

Sorry Pel and Maria! You slipped in there without me noticing... this'll be a quick one 'coz it's getting waaaaaaaay late

No. Trust me. No it was not <g>. My knees were knocking as I opened this folder... But everyone has been wonderful so far!

Sure! It's the Tipperary air, you see. Makes me go , specially in August . As you can see, it works...when you wanna do something crazy

Aww, thank you and I hope to see many more messages from you!

Anyway, I'd better sign off before I start repeating repeating myself

Thank you both once again!
Sara (yawning)

Lex is evil! I really do not like him! But I love this story! I was almost completely thinking it was Clark, and I say almost for one reason. I don't know what that one reason is, I guess just a suspicion that it might not be him... The Florence comment got me thinking... In my mind, Clark would not fly Lois there as Superman, then tell her his secret... So then I thought then that it probably would not be him thinking all this... Anyways, I think I'm starting to sound like Lois here with all this babbling, so I'll go now! Great (but also just a little evil) story!

This is great!

I agree with Labby. I could hear Lex's twisted logic -- which you did an incredible job of capturing! -- from very early on. Gave me shivers!

Keep up the good work!

Sara, cute story.

From your title and the hint of an evil idea being behind it, we all pretty much gathered that it was Lex who was doing the 'talking'.

As others said, the parallels were nicely drawn and your thought pattern fit Lex very well.

NEXT!

Tank (who wished Lois would have remained that breezy and non-commital with Lex all along)

Sara

WOW! This is great.

Tricia

Wow very good Sara! Laura

Ooh. Vewy vewy clever.

It sounded like a Lex related story from the title, but if you hadn't described Lois' tasks as 'menial,' I would have completely thought it was Clark.

Creepy and Perceptive
Jen

Sara,

Just a quick comment here, I really should be sleeping. <g> This was absolutely wonderful! You hit the Lex logic right on the head, and it chilled me to the bone. Write more, soon!

Caroline

I had a sneaking suspicion this one was Lex from the very beginning. You were very careful to stay away from anything directly identifying the person who is thinking all this, so the longer that continued, the more obvious it was Lex.

Nice way to show how Superman and Luthor are so similar, which explains why Lois was attracted to both of them.

You got me! Congratulations!

Sara,
very well done
great story
merry

Priceless!

Since I have the bad habit of reading the FDK folders before reading the actual fanfics, I knew this was Lex before I began. But that did not lessen my enjoyment of this one bit. This was very well done, completely in character, and quite insightful. Excellent writing.

- Vicki

Wow Sara, you almost had me on this one...... great job!! What a clever and fresh idea!! )

Great!

Aww! Thank you! Nice to know that you enjoyed it even though you knew the twist!

For fear of getting repetitive – awwww once again! Thank you so much!

Wow! It’s not every day I get compliments like these! I am way blushing here!

Anyway, thanks everybody for your wonderfully kind comments and ‘gentle’ nagging <g>

Sara.

If I hadn't read the comment folder first, you would have had me hook-line-and-sinker!

Brava

James

PS. I would put a warning in there for those that read the last couple of paragraphs to avoid doing so at all costs.

I could've never imagined it was Lex! I was impressed

I've seen a series of these commercials, and I liked them a lot (although I generally don't like commercials).

Very good idea. Hope to see more from you soon.

See ya,
AnnaBtG.

P.S.:

I hope you don't mind me asking, but why Laura?

She's away for the week , but most likely, because that's her name.

Catching up on the boards, and I finally got to read this one. Nicely done, Sara! You did a great job.

I had a feeling it was Lex from the time he expressed frustration at Lois doing her own housework (and your note about "don't kill me" helped, too <g>) but I enjoyed reading all the parallels anyway. Nicely done and clever!

Kathy

Heyya James, Anna and Kathy! And...umm...hi to Rivka, too <g>. Hey, just trying to be nice...

Yay! Nice to know...but a little darn, anyway, that I didn’t get you from the start <g>.

LOL!

LOL! Why?

Yay! Thank you!

Really? Gee, didn’t think you could get them out of Ireland...yeah, I liked them too, especially...well...the Irish one <g>. Made me feel very patriotic all of a sudden .

Aww! Thank you!

LOL! Yes, as you can see, subtlety is something I am strongly lacking in .

Hey, it helps when you need to get annoying idiot boys off your back <g>.

And awwwww, all over again! Thank you!

Most of the fishies who escaped the net seem to have taken the hint from the title...I’m thinking of changing it – anybody agree?

Anyway, thanks again guys

Sara.

It's common for me, at least since I read a lot. It just makes Lex...sound more like Lex. Clark does chores all the time so if Lois had a bunch of stuff to do, I don't think he'd think anything about it. But Lex has a million servants for this that and the other, so of course he'd think washing some dishes or doing laundry is peasant's work.

Jen

Thanks for replying, Jen

Yeah, this makes a lot of sense...somehow, just can't visualise Clark saying 'menial tasks'...good point, thanks for explaining