Oh FinLi! What a wonderful WAFFy end to your story. I loved it. Absolutely loved how you tied it in to Clark's first arrival at the Planet.

And the way he glanced at her scar and then when she reached up to touch it and he smiled at her...ahhh, I just melted into a pile of goo.

I really enjoyed this story...now hurry up and get it posted to the archive so I can go back and read it again from start to finish!

Hi,

Great part.


What do you mean with "The End". We know the TV Serie, we want you to give us your version.

Personal, I feel like someone took my spoon out of my mouth when I was starting to taste this story.


MAF

Great job, FinLi! I thought it was really fitting how you made it all tie in with the show's pilot.
Although you wouldn't offend me at all if you kept going with it!

Marcy

I have to agree with Maria, FinLi. Your ending left something to be desired! I think you should have made Lois run after Clark, catch him, stare into his eyes and exclaim: "It's you! The mystery man who saved me!" And then Clark would have answered: "Yes, Lois, that was me. I've come here because I've spent every second since that day thinking about you! Lois, will you marry me?" And then he would start kissing her, and she would respond, and... okay, this is the PG folder, so you could just have him drag her into a conference room or something. Or, why not, he could spin into his suit and fly her off on a romantic super-date, which, seeing that this is the PG folder, we would have to imagine ourselves....

Are you sure this is really part 5/5, FinLi? I'd swear it's really part 5/6!

Ann

Hi Finli,

Your writing is fantastically descriptive, I really like it. I was really able to visualise the situations.

But like the others, I think that there is more here, or perhaps a sequel?

Thanks!

Helen

If you think we'er ganging up on you, WE ARE.

Great stuff. I really enjoyed how it ended. However I would never complain if the story were to continue.

Thanks for teasing us with those short posts. I clawed at my screen for more. It was tough, but it was a nice change. At least you posted frequently.

Very nicely done and BRAVA!

Have to echo the above comments. I loved the premise of this story, but I do believe that a continuation is in order.

Hi everyone,

It took me a good 15 minutes to find the courage to click on this link. I was so afraid that everyone would HATE the end of my story.

Like I said before, I really had no intention of continuing it after Lois was put into the ambulance, but I thought it needed to go further.

I stopped where I did because I'm currently working on another story that MAY be a sequel.

Thanks to all of you for all the kind words and feedback. It really means a lot to me. I can say that I wasn't really sure about this particular story. But it seems that it wasn't as bad as I thought.

Thanks again, You all are wonderful

FinLi

Hi FinLi,


Just curious.

MAF

uh, I guess you will have to wait and see

I enjoyed your story. Yes many of us would have seen you take this to 30 or 40 parts and have an entire alternate begining but your muse takes you where it takes you.