FDK Smart Teens Part 3 - 12/06/05 01:26 PM
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Kryptonite. Nothing else on Earth glowed like that.
Ain't that the truth...
Re: FDK Smart Teens Part 3 - 12/07/05 08:25 PM
Hi,
Great part.
Great part.
Re: FDK Smart Teens Part 3 - 12/08/05 01:30 AM
Ah, insomnia. My fanfic friend. 
. Only chance I get to catch up with things, these days, it seems. 
Anyway...
Still loving this one, Susan. You're still managing to make me feel very sorry for Philip and you've captured the plight of him and his friends - who wants to go from smart to dumb - beautifully.
The confrontation between Philip and Mindy was just perfectly done, capturing her completely, and, again, I love the way your dialogue flows so naturally and easily.
But...Clark and Lois are on the case! Philip has a whole team fighting in his corner, whether he wants them or not. This is good news!
Looks like Dudley doesn't need any drugs to be one smart cookie:
Maybe there's a lesson for Philip in there, eventually. I'm holding on to hope that there's redemption for him. Although I'm not so sure after reading that last conversation between him and Mindy. He's enjoying crime waaaaaaaaaay too much. 
Jessica Trask!! Whoa! That came out of left field. Eeek! Brilliant idea, Susan! With her in the mix, I have the feeling things are about to get even more interesting.
Nooooooooo! Fight harder, Philip! You're a good kid really! I know you are.
Yikes!!
Oh, this is so good, Susan. Quick! Where's part four!?
LabRat
. Only chance I get to catch up with things, these days, it seems. Anyway...
Still loving this one, Susan. You're still managing to make me feel very sorry for Philip and you've captured the plight of him and his friends - who wants to go from smart to dumb - beautifully.
The confrontation between Philip and Mindy was just perfectly done, capturing her completely, and, again, I love the way your dialogue flows so naturally and easily.
But...Clark and Lois are on the case! Philip has a whole team fighting in his corner, whether he wants them or not. This is good news!
Looks like Dudley doesn't need any drugs to be one smart cookie:
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“I think I can help with that.” Dudley pulled a small metal box out of his pocket, extending an antenna and adjusting a knob. “I thought we might want to keep track of him, so I slipped a small device into his wallet before he got up this morning.” A soft beep pulsed rhythmically as he smiled. “I wasn’t the electronics expert for nothing.”
Jessica Trask!! Whoa! That came out of left field. Eeek! Brilliant idea, Susan! With her in the mix, I have the feeling things are about to get even more interesting.
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A tingling of the emotion Phillip had once identified as guilt tugged at him, but his drug-induced apathy won the war.
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He couldn’t let the drug slip away from him again. A distant voice within his head called to him, warning Phillip of his oppressive addiction. But that voice didn’t matter. Mentamide 5 was everything.
Superman’s secret was nothing.
Superman’s secret was nothing.
Oh, this is so good, Susan. Quick! Where's part four!?
LabRat
Re: FDK Smart Teens Part 3 - 12/08/05 11:08 AM
Oh yes! Ditto LabRat! You've set up a really complex character here in Philip, Susan. He's so addicted that he'll do anything to get what he wants... he's turned completely amoral. 
Jessica Trask and Kryptonite... Mindy's downright dangerous now!
And I think I know what's coming next. Philip wants more Mentamide 5, Mindy won't give it to him so he has to give her something else she wants... and he has the biggest secret of them all. AAAARRRRGGHHHHH!!
Loved the scene with Lois and Clark and the other kids too - now he knows they know his secret! Poor Clark!
Wendy
Jessica Trask and Kryptonite... Mindy's downright dangerous now!
And I think I know what's coming next. Philip wants more Mentamide 5, Mindy won't give it to him so he has to give her something else she wants... and he has the biggest secret of them all. AAAARRRRGGHHHHH!!
Loved the scene with Lois and Clark and the other kids too - now he knows they know his secret! Poor Clark!
Wendy
Re: FDK Smart Teens Part 3 - 12/08/05 11:39 AM
Susan, I mean this with as much love as I can...YOU ARE 
!!!
I really like how you are writing Philip.
I see someone getting not a few nominations for best developed character...
James.
!!!I really like how you are writing Philip.
I see someone getting not a few nominations for best developed character...
James.
Re: FDK Smart Teens Part 3 - 12/08/05 02:09 PM
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I see someone getting not a few nominations for best developed character...
LabRat
Re: FDK Smart Teens Part 3 - 12/09/05 12:08 AM
Great story.. I really like the way you're developing these teen characters. It seems to flow naturally from what we knew of them back in the smart kids episode. 
More soon please.
Marcy
More soon please.
Marcy
Re: FDK Smart Teens Part 3 - 12/09/05 12:38 PM
Thank you all for responding so positively to my story. I really appreciate your support! James and Labrat: thank you - you are too kind. 
I hope everyone enjoys the ending.
Susan
James and Labrat: thank you - you are too kind. I hope everyone enjoys the ending.Susan