FDK: Smart Teens-Part 2 - 12/04/05 03:22 PM
Hi,
Great piece.
Great piece.
Re: FDK: Smart Teens-Part 2 - 12/04/05 07:22 PM
Aw I liked the converstation toward the end. This is intersting. More soon. Laura
Re: FDK: Smart Teens-Part 2 - 12/05/05 12:43 PM
Just started reading this and caught up.
Very entertaining and I like the premise.
Smart Kids was definitely a throw-a-way episode and the natural progression of the kid's lives afterwords and the non-involvement of the Kents are very realistic.
James
Very entertaining and I like the premise.
Smart Kids was definitely a throw-a-way episode and the natural progression of the kid's lives afterwords and the non-involvement of the Kents are very realistic.
James
Re: FDK: Smart Teens-Part 2 - 12/05/05 03:17 PM
Susan, I really liked this part!! 
Especially:Great moments there
~NICOLE
Especially:
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“I need your help. I didn’t really know where else to turn.” She gave half a laugh and said, almost to herself, “Funny. There was a time when I could have thought my own way out of this problem.”
“Well, I’ve learned over the years that it’s always good to rely on your friends.” Lois put a sympathetic smile on her face.
“Yeah, sure. I relied on my friends three years ago and look what happened.”
“Hey, it all worked out in the end.” Lois observed the question in Aymee’s face. “How much do you remember from all of that?”
“We all remember things.” Aymee glanced at Clark and caught his eyes. “Secrets we probably shouldn’t know.”
Lois could almost feel the nervous energy flash through her husband. The subject of the Smart Kids hadn’t come up since Lois had learned about Clark’s other identity; clearly, something had happened between Superman and the children in their shared history. And she knew the one thing that always put him on edge.
“Well, I’ve learned over the years that it’s always good to rely on your friends.” Lois put a sympathetic smile on her face.
“Yeah, sure. I relied on my friends three years ago and look what happened.”
“Hey, it all worked out in the end.” Lois observed the question in Aymee’s face. “How much do you remember from all of that?”
“We all remember things.” Aymee glanced at Clark and caught his eyes. “Secrets we probably shouldn’t know.”
Lois could almost feel the nervous energy flash through her husband. The subject of the Smart Kids hadn’t come up since Lois had learned about Clark’s other identity; clearly, something had happened between Superman and the children in their shared history. And she knew the one thing that always put him on edge.
~NICOLE
Re: FDK: Smart Teens-Part 2 - 12/05/05 06:04 PM
I just read parts 1 and 2. And even though I never really liked the episode Smart Kids (like pretty much everyone else around here 
) I really enjoyed this story. 
But I really liked the conversation between Lois and Clark at the end of part 2. We can see that Lois has come a great way from the distant woman she'd been three years ago, to the caring and warm woman she is now. Great job
!
Looking forward to more,
~Julia
) I really enjoyed this story. But I really liked the conversation between Lois and Clark at the end of part 2. We can see that Lois has come a great way from the distant woman she'd been three years ago, to the caring and warm woman she is now. Great job
!Looking forward to more,
~Julia
Re: FDK: Smart Teens-Part 2 - 12/06/05 04:30 AM
Susan
A great part!
Tricia
A great part!
Tricia
Re: FDK: Smart Teens-Part 2 - 12/06/05 09:47 AM
Thank you all for reading my story! I appreciate your kind words. I hope you enjoy the turn of events in part 3. Susan
Susan
Re: FDK: Smart Teens-Part 2 - 12/06/05 10:53 AM
Yikes! Philip and Mindy in cahoots. Not a good combination! Can't help feeling sorry for Philip, though. Poor kid's so mixed up.
The differences in Lois's attitudes, then and now, as she perceives them, were interesting.
This segment, we got more from Karen, and once again you bring her to life, with some beautiful introspection.
And I just loved the whole conversation with Clark and Lois. Everything about your writing flows so naturally - the dialogue, the introspection, the prose. It's a joy to read, Susan, and absolutely fascinating.
EDIT: LOL. Just read the other comments.
GMTA, Tricia.
LabRat
The differences in Lois's attitudes, then and now, as she perceives them, were interesting.
This segment, we got more from Karen, and once again you bring her to life, with some beautiful introspection.
And I just loved the whole conversation with Clark and Lois. Everything about your writing flows so naturally - the dialogue, the introspection, the prose. It's a joy to read, Susan, and absolutely fascinating.
EDIT: LOL. Just read the other comments.
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Yikes! Philip and Mindy together can't be good.
LabRat