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I am thrilled to have been one of the betas on this short tale. It's got just about everything you'd want in a dramatic but non-WHAMmy story. I'd tell you all about it here but - spoilers, sweetie!

Thank you very much, Terry.

What an opening! This shows that after all the investigating and stakeouts, the story has to be written and done in such a way as to draw the readers into the article. It is what all writers strive to do, either for a newspaper article of a novel. Speaking of which, if anyone wants to understand about the difficulties of writing, I recommend watching Finding Forrester a film done in 2000 and the late great Sean Connery as the title character. What a shame that in all the articles recently written about Mr. Connery this film is never mentioned. Portraying such vulnerability on his part took a tremendous amount of humility and courage.


Good heavens! That poor plant has suffered so many indignities from Lois and newsroom coffee. No wonder its appears is down in the mouth!


Yup, this is how a newsroom is run!


Oh good grief! What happened to Clark!


What?!?


Yikes!

OK, Lois may be trying to walk away from Clark now, but like any good investigative reporter, she's going to track this story down!

Bakasi, you have my complete and undivided attention...

Just what I wanted to read!

Thank you very much for your feedback, Morgana. I hope you'll like the rest as well.

Wow, what an amazing story so far!! You had me hooked after the first paragraph.

And since I just now read it, I also had the pleasure of reading Chapter Two. The emotional and physical trauma Clark endured is definitely tissue-worthy. Your writing is very compelling, and I look forward to Chapter Three. Except that's listed as the final chapter, so I'm sure I'll have mixed emotions about this story ending. Maybe you could be enticed to continue this AU?

Thanks for your encouraging feedback, cuidadora. I seriously hope you won't be having mixed feelings after that last chapter. I admit that this story could have been an epic fic. I decided against that. I hope you'll like this story nonetheless.

Wow, a very intense path they went down, and very possible with the minor alterations you implanted.
I'm glad they're finally facing the truth and that it seems like they've both grown up a bit (which, considering how much time had passed....).
Looking forward to more

Am enjoying this story with it's unique take on Clark's trip to New Krypton. I look forward to part 3 but will be sad to see the story come to a close so soon.

Thanks for your feedback Blueowl and Elizabeth. I'm glad you're enjoying this story.

Just read part 3. Wow! What a wonderful job you did with this story, a bit of a roller coaster on the emotions towards the end... deserves a sequel! Thanks for writing such wonderful tales.

Well done, a very engaging tale.

I told you it was gonna be good!

I didn't catch this on the beta read, but this time I noticed that Clark's physical improvement (and the gradual return of his powers) came about when he and Lois reconnected. She is truly his other half, just as he is truly her other half. They really are stronger together than either one is alone. And now both of them can smile more.

Ah, if only Real Life worked out that well.

If Real Life was so simple, we wouldn't need fanfic or other fiction to indulge in, would we?

Thank you all so much for the kind feedback. You're making my day.

Well this was a happy ending Glad they saw the light before it was too late.
I wonder how long it'll be before Superman returns, though now that he has a daughter, maybe it's better for him to hold off a bit and really begin living again (with Lois).
Anyway, good story ^_^

Excellent story with a beautiful ending. I think I didn't explain my previous comment well. When I say that I have mixed feelings about a story ending, it is a big compliment. I will miss your writing, and while this story is at a stopping point, it also could easily have one or more sequels. If that's not in your plans, I accept and honor that. And if in the future your muse has a inspiration, I'm sure I'm not the only one in line to read it.

Thank you very much for the compliments. I don't think there will be a sequel to this story. I promised Morgana to finish a story that has been sitting on my hard drive for quite some time now. And my muse is already busy mulling over another plot bunny that begs me to be written. So maybe, just maybe you're going to see more of my writing in the foreseeable future...

Poor Clark, Zara and Ching. Life on New Krypton was not happy for any of them. Perhaps it would have been better if they had not come to Earth to get Clark. His appearance only caused more disruption rather than assisting them as they had hoped.


In the end, Trey had more nobility than all of them.


No kidding! How will this all end?

Thanks for your feedback, Morgana. I hope you'll like the last part.

Wow! Am I ever glad this story is completed and did not languish in your hard drive! So much is packed into this final chapter...


I have no doubt seeing the real Lex Luthor must have been frightening. John Shea's portrayal of the billionaire at time could be quite chilling. Here with a few sentences his menace is brought completely to the surface.

You are an excellent writer, this fandom is happy to have you here.

Yeah, sorry about the long delay on the story I sent you to beta. But I think I know what's going to happen in the last part. I'm going to work on it as soon as RL gives me a chance to do so.

Bakasi,
Thanks so very much for writing this story. I saw above that you had to fight the urge to make this an epic story but I wish you'd gone that way. I absolutely love long, well-written stories like this one has the potential to be. I waited until the whole story was posted, as I usually do, and I finally got around to reading it. I feel you hit the relationship between Clark and Lois spot on. I especially liked the insight Lois reading Clark's journal gave. Having Lois read Clark's thoughts and integrating them with her experiences gave her both sides of the story. It completed the missing pieces that allowed Lois to understand where Clark was coming from. The part about New Krypton was especially enlightening. It showed how Clark was affected by the war and by the squabbling after Nor had been defeated. That was unlike anything anyone has written about NK and it was refreshing, and I consider, accurate a portrayal of the New Kryptonians. I never thought they were as ready to follow Zara and Ching so your take supported my impression. Although most people were probably stunned when Clark told Lois there was nothing more for them now I was not surprised. Your journal entries showed how hurt Clark was, both with her breaking up with Superman, flirting with Scardino and then not falling in love with Clark, he had to be sure that, especially after three years, his feelings for Lois were over. The scene where Lois kissed Clark on the cheek before walking out of the suite was poignant and it made me feel for the characters. Then when Clark comes into the Planet the next day and they reconcile had me cheering. I think Martha was right and his reaction to Lois seemed to bear this out because all of a sudden his heat vision is back and he can shave and cut his hair. I'm glad they got together at the end and, if your muse allows, I know I'd love to see more of how their relationship develops. I wonder how Lois would be as a mother to little Sara, could be interesting.
Ray

Thank you for the kind feedback, Ray. I think I didn't make myself very clear. This could have been an epic, alright. But I don't think that I could have written it as an epic - or if I had, I doubt that you would still have considered it well written.

The story that I wrote was the story that I actually wanted to tell. Of course, there are many aspects of the story that could have been told in more detail. And there were scenes that I wanted to write. I had a (probably nfic) version of their first intimate encounter. I wanted to write the break-up between Lois and Superman. Initially, I had written the scene in the bookshop from Clark's point of view. When I thought of this premise, I wanted to tell the whole story from Clark's POV. But that just didn't work out. Clark was very difficult to tackle. He was so angry and self-righteous and stubbornly insisting that Lois had to love him rather than Superman. He couldn't forgive and he wouldn't believe Lois. It was much easier to tell the story from Lois' POV and add Clark's POV indirectly through the book he wrote and his journal.

I'd like to visit this universe in the future, if I find something worth telling. I already thought about exploring how Lois and Clark might explore the intimate aspects of a relationship. That would likely lead me toward the nfic folder - if anyone might be interested in this kind of story.
But for the time being, my muse is busy with one story I'm currently writing and another idea that keeps nagging my muse. If only I had the time to write...

Just read the entire thing and it was a lovely little tale, a bit different than a lot of the LC fics. I enjoyed the take on the characters and the what if. And, of course, I enjoyed the happy ending.

/Cosmic