Yay, I start a comments thread, lol.

And ooooooooooo . . .

OK, at the end--*finally* we see Luthor. And oy--what a place to leave! Just after swearing on the channel that you would *never* leave us with awful cliffhangers. :p

And the pain, the pain was tangible. Lois' pain at Clark's betrayal, Clark's pain at her rejection . . . very well done!

And . . . I'll leave the rest of my FDK up to Krafty's excellent skill, since she always seems to say what I wish I could--10 times more eloquently.

Interesting writing style! But it definitely works for me and for this excellent story.

Oh no!!

~Julia

Oh CRAP!!

Dang, why does Lois gotta be sooooo mean??? You did it good too. Felt like I was standing in a blizzard for a couple of seconds.

Anyway, keep it coming!! and here's to hoping Lex gets a punch to the face.

TEEEEEEJ

Hi,

Great part.

Very painful! It's so clear that both of them are talking with their emotions shredded and not with their rational brains. She's not taking in what he's telling her - including the fact that he almost died and that it had something to do with her - and he's not taking in how much his lying hurt her.

At least she didn't want him to leave!

But now look what you've done! Lois calls Superman Clark just as Lex arrives!


Wendy

Please tell me that Lex didn't hear Lois call Superman Clark...Get back here!!

Oh... My... Wow...

Not only is this an incredibly powerful story, but you seem to have a talent at picking the absolutely most evil place to end each section!

This is just awesome!

More, soon, please? How about early on Tuesday instead of late? Or even on Monday? Or Sunday? Or NOW???

Irene

Oh please please please David post it all by Wednesday. I'm going back to work on Thursday and it drives me nuts and getting more of your wonderful story would certainly help with my mood.

Now of course you need to find a proper way to kill Lex. He can't know!!!!!!

Kaethel

Heartbroken. I'm just heartbroken.

The pain is very tangible here. She loves him, but is deeply hurt by his secretiveness.

Really lovely writing, David. I like the sparse style.

Can't wait to see how they (you) sort this out.

Wow! Now that was just painful but of course in a good way. I agree that you can't post soon enough and I'm all for finding new ways to kill Luthor.

Jackie

I can't believe I didn't post fdk for the first part...but you know how much I love it right?

Your style of writing is great! Something about it really makes stand out as great, its...its impact writing! Less is truly more it seems. How do you do that?

Anyways I have to go - but I wish I could write as well as you!

And I swear I'm not at all smug about the fact that I've seen the next part...why does no one look like they believe me? hehe!

/me runs away, hugging the file with the fic in it, giggling and yelling: "I love it! I love it! I lov...

Another solid part. Honestly, the sparse style isn't my thing, but that's just a personal preference, I guess. The subject matter is still great, though. I don't recall many stories where Luthor is around for the aftermath...and another mean cliff-hanger!!


Jen
:p

David

WOW! So powerful and poignant! I hope he didn't hear Lois.

I can't wait to read more. Please post it before Wednesday morning (Aussie time). I leave early on Wednesdays and don't get home until late. Otherwise I may have track you down and pay a visit with shears and a pitchfork.

Tricia

hmmm very interesting.

I dito Irene, that seriously was an evil place to end it.

Finding Lex at your door is like discovering a snake in your shoe. It's nothing if not sobering. Lois and Clark can now fight with Lex, not each other.

Holy Canoli David! get back here and finish this! More soon. Poor Clark! Lois he needs you! Lex, Oh noooooo! Ack! LAura

Wow, lots of emotion in this and soo painful for both of them!

Then Lex is at the door! HOLY!!

~Liz

Wow! I mean...wow!

More!

Yvonne

PS: Love the title. Love the style.

PPS: The sparseness of this feedback is in direct homage to David's most excellent style.

PPPS: And if you believe that, you'll believe anything.

oh my... wow! This is amazing! And what a cliffhanger.. please continue, asap!!!

Awesome story so far

Okay, skimming these comments is killing me because I don't have time to read this segment right now.

Just posting to say I haven't lost interest - may take me a day or so to get the free time to catch up, but I'll be back! Looking forward to it!

LabRat

Sorry, angst isn't my favorite, so I sort of skimmed this part, but you are totally to leave us where you did, which is all I can expect of one of your talent.

More soon please.

James

Remind me to kiss whoever it was that came up with the idea to support the new "talent"

Wow

I never expected I'd get such a positive response! Thank you, everyone, for the FDK.

I promise I'll be back with a decent response when I'm not about to fall asleep, but I'll sum up my reaction for now:

*ahem*

OMG!

WOW!

and

And... I'd like to point out that part 3 is going up a whole hour and a half early, so there's no need for pitchforks or shears... especially not shears, right Tricia?

Right.

/me puts on his shear-proof-jumpsuit... Please don't kill me!

WoWWWwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!

Great Job!
Had me at the edge of my seat