Comments: Investigating Superman - 05/03/04 05:47 AM
Great story, Nancy! When I urged you to give us some fanfic yesterday, I never dreamed that you'd have something posted so soon. And I really enjoyed this. Very well written, and nicely in character too. A revelation and a romance all in one - that's my kind of story.
I really liked the way Lois absorbed all the clues, and yet she didn't start putting it together until Clark disappeared on her once more. And then it was obvious once she spoke to Michael. Very nice use of those loose ends from the Pilot!
I had just one little niggle, and that relates to the timeline. The story throughout feels like a mid/late Season 1 story: Lois and Clark's relationship, for example, has them friends but she still occasionally snips at him in a way she'd mostly stopped doing by Season 2. Plus, if you move this to Season 2 you also have to take Luthor into account in Lois's commentary on men. And, given you mention Tempus, that means this has to take place after Clark asked Lois out (in The Phoenix) and after their first date (in Lucky Leon). They were much closer by then, and Clark for a long time had been far less jealous of Lois's interest in Superman - plus Lois had pretty much stopped trying to get close to Superman and just wanted to be his friend, mostly. Anyway, this just feels like a Season 1 story to me - but you don't have to pay any attention to my opinion if you don't want to!
You will be sending this to the Fanfic Archive, won't you?
Great debut, Nancy, and I hope we'll see more from you soon!
Wendy
I really liked the way Lois absorbed all the clues, and yet she didn't start putting it together until Clark disappeared on her once more. And then it was obvious once she spoke to Michael. Very nice use of those loose ends from the Pilot!
I had just one little niggle, and that relates to the timeline. The story throughout feels like a mid/late Season 1 story: Lois and Clark's relationship, for example, has them friends but she still occasionally snips at him in a way she'd mostly stopped doing by Season 2. Plus, if you move this to Season 2 you also have to take Luthor into account in Lois's commentary on men. And, given you mention Tempus, that means this has to take place after Clark asked Lois out (in The Phoenix) and after their first date (in Lucky Leon). They were much closer by then, and Clark for a long time had been far less jealous of Lois's interest in Superman - plus Lois had pretty much stopped trying to get close to Superman and just wanted to be his friend, mostly. Anyway, this just feels like a Season 1 story to me - but you don't have to pay any attention to my opinion if you don't want to!
You will be sending this to the Fanfic Archive, won't you?
Great debut, Nancy, and I hope we'll see more from you soon!
Wendy