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Posted By: VirginiaR FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/06/12 12:40 AM
Wrong Place, Wrong Time, Wrong Clark TOC can be found Here

smile1 Moving right along. smile1

Per the chapter headings: yes, I realize that there are 3 in this one posting alone, when in other Parts there are none. As I've mentioned before, I put Chapter headings where and when I see fit. There really is no set size or plan to them. They will make more sense in the Archive version, when all Part indicators (and cliffies) disappear and all one is left with are these random Chapter Headings. jump

Please give me your thoughts.
Posted By: scifiJoan Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/06/12 07:42 AM
Oh boy - H.G. Wells is back! I don't think Clark is going to want to leave this dimension. I wish Superman had stayed a moment to talk with Martha and Jonathan, though I understand why he left.

Chapter headings as they fit works for me.

Joan
Posted By: KenJ Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/06/12 01:31 PM
Virginia,

Okay, so Wells finally shows up. How is he going to clear up this mess and get the original Superman back?
Posted By: Sydney Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/07/12 06:06 AM
Hi Virginia,

I love Henderson's point of view: very interesting, indeed!

And the few lines about Clark/Superman in Smallville were very well written: poignant... and sad; but I understand why he left.

So, Herb is back: what happens now?
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Herb was beginning to see that all his hopes and plans for this Clark had already flown out the window.
May be... wave
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/07/12 10:01 AM
Joan: The relationship between Clark and M&J is a complex one. Glad the chapter headings aren't a distraction. smile1

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Oh boy - H.G. Wells is back! I don't think Clark is going to want to leave this dimension.
Hmmm. I wonder why that is? [Linked Image]

Ken: Your favorite character is back.

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Okay, so Wells finally shows up. How is he going to clear up this mess and get the original Superman back?
Um... [Linked Image] Please remember that the characters don't have all the facts that you Readers do.

Sydney: It's hard to pull a fast one over on our favorite police inspector. laugh

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And the few lines about Clark/Superman in Smallville were very well written: poignant... and sad; but I understand why he left.
Thank you. blush

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So, Herb is back: what happens now?
Stuff. Things. [Linked Image] It's a process.
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/09/12 07:44 AM
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Another Point of View
Hmm…another POV?

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Inspector Henderson glanced at the two reporters who had just entered and sat down in his office.
hyper It’s getting time for Crush!


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He knew he shouldn’t be doing that since it would set a bad precedent, but with her unable to do many things one-handed, he let her have a little leeway for a while.
Ooooh! This is going to be fun in the future laugh

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Having been awoken by an extremely graphic nightmare of Lois bleeding from a head wound
Drat. Here I thought he might awaken from an extremely graphic non-nightmare.

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Clark was hovering above her apartment building when he heard a news report of tornados in Kansas.
Oh dear.

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Her boyfriend hadn’t been so fortunate. Superman found him lying within what was left of the mobile home.
jawdrop He was one of the few to stick around and you *killed* him? [Linked Image]
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/09/12 07:46 AM
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“Superman!” he heard Martha Kent call out to him.
razz

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“I’d have Clark move in to your room before I hire a nurse.”
hyper

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“You could have Clark move into your room. I’m sure, if you just let him, Clark could nurse you back to health faster than anyone Lex Luthor would hire.”
wave Michael
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/10/12 12:38 AM
Michael: wave And, no, another POV isn't like the sequel to Another Day.

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It’s like those guys who like using whips on themselves.
HENDERSON: Pretty much.

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He is *quite* judgmental, isn’t he?
HENDERSON: Are you saying just because I don't have a national stage <<cough, newspaper, cough>> to aire my opinion, I'm not allowed to have one?

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You mean, like sailing a thousand ships to win her back? Well, reclaim her.
HENDERSON: No, I totally get a beautiful face is worth rescuing, but if it's accompanied by a smart-alack mouth... Menalaus might be wise just to let Paris have her.

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Oh dear. Also, Clark’s not very good at following through on his Superman’s-dead-and-buried routine. Unless Superman’s now an Undead Kryptonian American
CLARK: I just didn't want to look like creepy stalker boyfriend, especially since she's already has a creepy stalker. Superman watching Lois's apartment seems like concern for her well-being. Me, doing it, creepy stalker guy.

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She pays Superman in kind?
She pays Superman with good press for giving her the story? Possibily.

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Nah, glutton for punishment.
Tomato/potato.

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He hasn’t. Besides, it’s cheaper than toilet paper.
She didn't know he swiped the paper from a collegue. And they really need to pay the MPD more, if that's the case. Lois will write an article, if it means less MPD reading Met Star trash.

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CAT: No, they’ve already found the witch.
LOIS: I'm not a witch!

CAT: Me thinks she protests too much for someone who was never accused of said crime.

LOIS: Um... Look, a naked man!

CAT: <<looks around>> Where? Where?! Ugh, Ralph! I'm Blind!

LOIS: [Linked Image]

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Lois got her hand on some Kryptonite and had accidently over-incapacitated Superman in her ardor?
Nope, Kryptonite hasn't shown up in this dimension yet.

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He can fly.
HENDERSON: Really?

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‘Patrolling’ means he’s watching single, brunette women with shot-up arms in their apartment.
Tomato / Potato.

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True. Say, will she still call him a friend when he pokes her with other things without her consent?
LOIS(to Lex): [Linked Image] That's NOT allowed!

LEX: He said it! <<points to Michael>> Not me!

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/goes and buys ‘probed by an alien’ t-shirt as wedding present for Lois.
LOIS: I'm getting married?

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She’s getting older and only takes them on one-after-the-other these days?
It's been a long 48 hours.

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/nods/ She spent the night.
Yes, and Lex is upset at missing the outtakes!

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Well, he wanted a naughty girlfriend, now he’s got one.
CLARK: [Linked Image] Why didn't anyone warn me?

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What’s the difference between a creepy stalker and a superhero?
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X-ray vision.
SUPERMAN: I'm not using my X-Ray vision to look into Lois's apartment unless I hear something usual, like Lois laughing, or cooking.

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Yeah, I can just picture that headline: Superman only takes on small incidents – Tommy Garrison proven correct.
Oh, so you do read the Met Star?

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Maybe if he built an ice castle in the Arctic and locked her in there?
That's going a bit to the extreme. Anyway, she'd probably get cold, and he'd have to warm her up with his heat vision, and that would melt the ice... it would be a huge mess.

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Maybe consummating would help him sleep?
CLARK: But I told her I'd wait until she's ready.

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“Jimmy can make pasta”?
Lucy can order take-out like any good Lane woman.

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So, tactile danger is less than visual danger?
Pasta is more of a sensory overload, with the taste, and the sight, and the smell, remind Clark of Lois touching him and telling him that she wanted him.

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Or she’s just enjoying her little game of cat and mouse. Wonder when she and Cat will become best friends.
Not for a long while.

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It’s getting time for Crush!
EW: <<checks outline / timeline>> So it is.

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Ooooh! This is going to be fun in the future
Clark adds another item to his list of things he wished he'd never done.

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Drat. Here I thought he might awaken from an extremely graphic non-nightmare.
Lois isn't the only one who needs to heal.

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He was one of the few to stick around and you *killed* him?
Not CLARK! And I didn't kill the guy, tornados did.

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Wouldn’t it be fun if they called him ‘Clark’?
EW: <<hugs compuer>> Wouldn't it?

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So, she won’t be going for a trip in the Big Brother house even when it’s a paid gig?
LUCY: I've leaving one psycho roomie. I don't need a house full of them.

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Lois is always in danger. Watching her is very prudent.
CLARK: See! I'm not an idiot.

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Well, when he’s out with Batman, it’s Superman who’s dressed in drags.
SUPERMAN: It's because I like color, isn't it?

BM: I'm Batman!

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LOIS, a few seconds later: “Fine. I’ll call him right away.”
CLARK: <<Who just flew in>> Hello? Hello? That's strange I could have sworn my phone was ringing.

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I thought the vacation was just a ruse?
But Alt-Dimension needs a Superman! They've got all those people walking around with Tempus guns.

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Wait! Herb doesn’t know, either?
Doesn't know what? He knows that this Lois had similar things happen to her like the Lois from his dimension, but he assumed Kal-El of this dimension died on impact because he was never adopted by the Kents.

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That was not in the plan.
WELLS: That was *my* plan.

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Oh dear. He never realized she *wasn’t* truly bonkers.
Nope.

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Oh? Innocent bystander getting wacked accidently?
Lois is currently going through the 5 stages of grief. Anger, anger, boinking her partner, anger, and anger.

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…bitca?
Mad Dog?

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Also, it’s that time of the month when she’s just been shot.
If that were the case I doubt Menken, Lex, or Superman would have made it out of that alley alive.

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So, Ralph’s made his appearance?
He had to be hired at the Planet at some point to be around by the time PML happens, right?

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And that’s a sexual harassment suit waiting to happen. The first in the Planet’s history.
Ralph suing Lois? Lois suing Ralph? Jeanine suing Clark? huh
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/10/12 03:10 PM
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HENDERSON: Are you saying just because I don't have a national stage <<cough, newspaper, cough>> to aire my opinion, I'm not allowed to have one?
According to Lois: No.

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HENDERSON: No, I totally get a beautiful face is worth rescuing, but if it's accompanied by a smart-alack mouth... Menalaus might be wise just to let Paris have her.
True. And Lex might be wise to just let Superman have her. Or is that the other way ‘round?

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Superman watching Lois's apartment seems like concern for her well-being. Me, doing it, creepy stalker guy.
Right. Huh, why is Lois drool-shaking her head?

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She pays Superman with good press for giving her the story? Possibily.
wave Michael
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/11/12 10:17 PM
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According to Lois: No.
LOIS: That's not true! Everyone is allowed to have opinions. Mine just happen to be the only right ones though.

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True. And Lex might be wise to just let Superman have her. Or is that the other way ‘round?
Actually, "Clark" in this case. But a "Dan Scardino" might work in a pinch.

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Right. Huh, why is Lois drool-shaking her head?
I'm sorry. Did you think Lois was the only blind character in my story?

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“More funds for a more educated police force”? Oh look, Preston Carpenter already organized a charity function to that regard. You can read all about it in the Star.
And look! It's being held in that old condemed building. I hope nothing happens to the guests, requiring a rescue from Superman.

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/nods/ Just watch what happens when Lois nibbles his ear.
CLARK: I plead the Fifth.

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I was just trying to be helpful?
LOIS (to Lex): And, you're going to tell me that you weren't thinking about doing it all along?

LEX: I would never... Lois, how could you EVER think of me like that?! I respect you too much to ever, consider doing anything that dirty and pleasurable to you.

LOIS: Pleasurable?

LEX: <<all innocence>> Well, are you saying that I wouldn't enjoy myself with you?

LOIS: How about we never try and find out?

LEX: [Linked Image]

SUPERMAN: <<standing sternly with arms crossed>> I agree with Lois.

LEX: Spoil sport.

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/nods/ Soon. Just a couple more months till the Honeymoon Suite.
grumble I knew I shouldn't have had Cat teaching the sexual harrisment workshop.
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/12/12 02:27 PM
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LOIS: That's not true! Everyone is allowed to have opinions. Mine just happen to be the only right ones though.
wave Michael
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/13/12 12:00 AM
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She’s blind? Again? How did that happen?
No, not literally. Face blind, i.e. can't see the Clark in the Superman blind. Clark's blind in the he can't see the woman who has the hots for him in front of his face blind. It makes for fun interactions.

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They’re just in the process of revoking that one for dark side happenings in fanfic.
Oh, dear.

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/imagines Lex picking out the right shade-of-green Kryptonite cufflinks/ also,
Oh, oh, oh... grumble I knew I should have been more specific. Cat! When I said sexual harrisment seminar, I meant the prevention of, not the application of.
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/13/12 03:10 PM
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No, not literally.
Duh! Also, some people have to be more specific than others when making certain statements.

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I want to say one of MozartMaid's, but I could be wrong.
Huh. It is? /goes looking for loose disk inside brain/ [Linked Image]

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Don't remind me or my characters will go off and run, hiding in Sue's closet again, and this story will never get finished.
Oh dear. Does Clark not have the staying power for a long ‘run’?

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Terribly sorry, I meant one person in a room with only one person in it.
Yes, but how would he discern the difference without checking to make sure? /won’t shut up until Clark goes looking to make sure that there’s only Lois-approved activity going on instead of also Lucy-approved stuff/

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Because you got confused and told Margot;Lois instead of Teri;Lois.
/inserts tiny screwdriver to adjust detector/

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CLARK: I don't think so. I know it's been a while, so I don't think it be *that* difficult.
So, hard but not difficult. Poor Lois. She really bought into the whole advertisement.

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quote: Oh. Okay. /whispers to EW/ She does know she’s headed for L.A., right? Television portrayal is not always favorable.

Lucy in ML was an actress, I don't recall if I ever gave *this* Lucy a career path.
No, was thinking TV portrayal *of* L.A., not when on TV yourself.

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PERRY: [Grumble] I knew I should have been more specific. Cat! When I said sexual harrisment seminar, I meant the prevention of, not the application of.
CAT: Why would anyone want to prevent it? confused

wave Michael
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/14/12 11:23 PM
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Duh! Also, some people have to be more specific than others when making certain statements.
I thought when one said that Lois was blind, everyone knew that it was because she couldn't see the Superman in Clark Kent.

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Oh dear. Does Clark not have the staying power for a long ‘run’?
We're in it for the long haul, but EW needs to take it one part at a time, please. Otherwise I look to see if I can see the end of the train and start hyperventalating when I can't see it.

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Yes, but how would he discern the difference without checking to make sure? /won’t shut up until Clark goes looking to make sure that there’s only Lois-approved activity going on instead of also Lucy-approved stuff/
Lucy only approves of one of those two activities? <<looks skeptical>>

But you're absolutely right. If he heard ANYONE getting pleasure in Lois's room, he'd take a peek and clear confusion.

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So, hard but not difficult. Poor Lois. She really bought into the whole advertisement.
Would she rather have difficult, yet not hard?

LOIS: I think not!

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No, was thinking TV portrayal *of* L.A., not when on TV yourself.
LUCY: I've lived in LA for the last two years!

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CAT: Why would anyone want to prevent it?
There's a vignette that needs to be written. LOIS teaches the class and Ralph attends it. [Linked Image]
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/15/12 06:59 AM
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I thought when one said that Lois was blind, everyone knew that it was because she couldn't see the Superman in Clark Kent.
Yeah, but that’s no fun to joke about laugh

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Otherwise I look to see if I can see the end of the train and start hyperventalating when I can't see it.
/whispers/ You’re looking in the wrong direction. You must look in the direction the trains driving. There, about a 500m ahead, there’s the end of the train. We’ve been chasing it for a while now. Also, you supposed to stay inside the train, not climb onto the roof like Lois does.

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Lucy only approves of one of those two activities? <<looks skeptical>>
No,no, Lucy approves of what Lois is doing, as long as it’s balanced with the stuff Lucy herself also approves of.

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But you're absolutely right. If he heard ANYONE getting pleasure in Lois's room, he'd take a peek and clear confusion.
See? Was that so hard, Clark? wave Michael
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/17/12 10:39 PM
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Yeah, but that’s no fun to joke about.
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/whispers/ You’re looking in the wrong direction. You must look in the direction the trains driving. There, about a 500m ahead, there’s the end of the train. We’ve been chasing it for a while now. Also, you supposed to stay inside the train, not climb onto the roof like Lois does.
LOIS: But I was sure I saw Clark head out this way...

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No,no, Lucy approves of what Lois is doing, as long as it’s balanced with the stuff Lucy herself also approves of.
Lucy disapproves of activities in the bedroom? Oh, right, working, researching, and sleep. Gotcha.

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See? Was that so hard, Clark?
CLARK: Sorry, it took me a while to see the Kryptonian in the researcher.

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Yeah, but if it’s not difficult, than it won’t be a hard thing to do for very long, either.
LOIS: laugh

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/imagines Ralph imagining Lois in an…appropriate…outfit teaching him his lessons/
/Lois thinking [Linked Image] [Linked Image] [Linked Image]
PERRY: Lois, I'm thinking you might not be the way to go. Clark!
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/18/12 01:07 PM
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LOIS: But I was sure I saw Clark head out this way...
wave Michael
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/19/12 10:40 PM
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EW: But you're absolutely right. If he heard ANYONE getting pleasure in Lois's room, he'd take a peek and clear confusion.

ER: See? Was that so hard, Clark?

CLARK: Sorry, it took me a while to see the Kryptonian in the researcher.

ER: Umm… I missed a step there… huh
Kryptonian (Zara) in the researcher (Sara).

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Don’t worry. Clark won’t mind if you cheat during the game.
CLARK: Define "cheat". There's cheating that I don't approve of AT ALL. There's fake cheating which Meg Ryan demonstrated so well. There's cheating by oneself that I wouldn't mind watching. [Linked Image] And there's cheating to make me give Lois a win. (My personal favorite, BTW.) Or have I completely gone off topic?

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<heat vision laser of Ralph> (Clark’s the one on the right. The artificial heatvision is just for illustration purposes)
CLARK: No, Ralph, we WON'T be using Lois for demonstration purposes. We'll be using Wally.

RALPH: Wally?

WALLY: Me? I'm supposed to be the girl in this scenario?

CLARK: No, you'll be Ralph. He'll be the girl.

RALPH: shock Wally will be *me*? But... but... but... he doesn't have my moves down.

CLARK: He'll be able to improvise.

WALLY: [Linked Image] Do I haveta? I don't really want to talk to Ralph like he talks to women.

CLARK: It's the only way you two will learn how women feel when you treat them this way. After we go through this for a few times, you'll switch: Wally will be the woman and Ralph, you'll be Wally.

RALPH: I don't think I want to work at the D.P. that badly, after all.

WALLY: Me, either.

Lois, Cat, and rest of DP staff: party
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/20/12 01:55 PM
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Kryptonian (Zara) in the researcher (Sara).
Oh. Oops?

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[…] Or have I completely gone off topic?
wave Michael
Posted By: X Phile Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/20/12 07:11 PM
Loved the scene with Henderson! I liked seeing things from his point of view. And it’s always nice to see Martha and Jonathon.
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“I’ll be fine,” Lois said, and even without x-ray vision Clark knew she said the words through gritted teeth. “I’d have Clark move in to your room before I hire a nurse.”

“Or…” Lucy teased. “You could have Clark move into your room. I’m sure, if you just let him, Clark could nurse you back to health faster than anyone Lex Luthor would hire.”
laugh

Unfortunately my reviews will have to be shorter now because I don't have a lot of time. Neurobiology will be the death of me xD 15+ hours of homework and I didn’t even finish it frown
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/20/12 10:14 PM
Michael: Oh, dear. Did I cross that line again? I have so much trouble with that darn line. wink

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Wally? Also, does that mean that Clark doesn’t approve of Ralph demonstrating all the ways of how not to touch a female coworker?
CLARK: Of course, I approve. But he has to do the touching on Wally. And Wally is more than welcome to punch his lights out if Ralph touches him somewhere he doesn't want to be touched.

WALLY: Works for me.

RALPH: I don't want to touch him.

CLARK: What's the difference between him and Cat?

CAT: Honey, if you don't know that answer, you have more serious problems than we thought. It will take long intensive therapy to cure. Fortunately, I know a good sex therapist.

RALPH: hyper I'll take sex therapy with Cat.

CAT: Honey, I wasn't offering it to you.

WALLY: <starts to raise hand>

CAT: Or you.

CLARK: I know the difference. I was asking them.

LOIS: Can I punch Ralph's lights out? But without him touching me?

CLARK: Lois, Perry asked that you sit this seminar out because we need at least one reporter in the newsroom in case of breaking story.

LOIS: <slight pout> Fine. But call me, I'll be right outside the conference room door if you need me to punch his lights out.

EW: I've gone on too long, so I'll end this little vignette right here. Thank you.

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He means, hands on?
EW: See above.
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/20/12 10:17 PM
X Phile: Welcome back! Sporatic FDK is always welcome. Hope your classes are going well.

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Loved the scene with Henderson! I liked seeing things from his point of view. And it’s always nice to see Martha and Jonathon.
Always good to hear. smile1

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Unfortunately my reviews will have to be shorter now because I don't have a lot of time. Neurobiology will be the death of me xD 15+ hours of homework and I didn’t even finish it
Okay, you win. clap (My daughter's 2nd grade homework took forever, but not that long.) Let's hope that it isn't a daily class.
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/22/12 07:08 AM
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Oh, dear. Did I cross that line again? I have so much trouble with that darn line.
wave Michael
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/22/12 02:36 PM
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Wally’s better stacked?
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RALPH: Lois his harder.
WALLY: /nods/
Do you mean Lois "HITS" harder? How is this a difference between Wally and Cat? huh I bet Cat hits harder too.

WALLY: Hey!

CAT: [Linked Image]

WALLY: <<groan>> I lie down corrected.

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Oh dear. So, she’s not allowed to attend seminars during that particular time of the month?
LOIS: [Linked Image] Care to repeat that?

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notworthy
Thank you. [Linked Image]
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/23/12 03:07 AM
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quote: Wally’s better stacked?

EW: [Laugh]

CAT: <Not pleased>
but but but Wally’s 300 pounds of wobbling, sweating fat. Of course, he’s got bigger ones. They also have a lot of drag.

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Do you mean Lois "HITS" harder?
Oops. /nods/

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How is this a difference between Wally and Cat?
wave Michael
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/23/12 08:43 PM
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but but but Wally’s 300 pounds of wobbling, sweating fat. Of course, he’s got bigger ones. They also have a lot of drag.
Oh, you mean he needs a "bro". (aka a man-bra, or is it called a 'man-ssiere'?)

WALLY: What? I don't weigh 300 pounds. 240 at most. And it's all muscle.

CAT: <looks him up and down> 340, and he definately has more wobble than me, but it's mostly around the gut area.

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ER: Prosecution rests its case.

MET STAR HEADLINE: Daily Planet reporter arrested as main suspect in gruesome murder of reader. Superman insists it was not premeditated.
LOIS: <<innocently>> Well, if they read the Met Star, they really should be expecting it, shouldn't they? BTW, see Female Hawk's "The Accused" on the accuracy of Met Star's inaccurate reporting of those type of events. wink
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 09/24/12 12:32 PM
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Oh, you mean he needs a "bro".
[Linked Image]

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BTW, see Female Hawk's "The Accused" on the accuracy of Met Star's inaccurate reporting of those type of events.
wave Michael
Posted By: John Lambert Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 03/12/13 06:56 PM
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“Yes, so you say,” Henderson went on. He picked up on that morning’s Metropolis Star he had snatched off someone’s desk when he returned from Kent’s apartment, and dropped it in front of them on his desk. The headline blared: “Garrison Calls Superman a Chicken. Is He Right?”
I think it should just be "picked up that", I do not think you need the on.

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Kent nodded. “I spoke to Murray Brown from the Superman Foundation a few days ago when Menken’s started spreading rumors of Superman attending the fight. Mr. Brown told me that Superman wouldn’t be fighting anyone for money, charity or otherwise,” he said. The man looked like he wanted to be anywhere but here having this conversation. Henderson wondered why that was.
I think that should just be "Menken started". Either that or you could maybe go with "Menken's office started".

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There wasn’t anyone on it, but from experience he knew many people were hurt from falling debris as from the winds themselves.
I think that should be "knew as many".

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He gazed down saw her in courtyard between the barn and the house. She was looking at him with such pride, that his heart began to ache. Oh, to have his mom look at him like that.
I think there should be an "and between down and saw and a "the" in front of courtyeard.
Posted By: John Lambert Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 03/12/13 07:28 PM
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Clark hadn’t heard of the offer, nor was he surprised Lois hadn’t mentioned it him. She knew that after Lex shot her, any chance of civility between the two men was null and void.
I think that should be "it to him" at the end of the first sentance.

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“Herb!” Clark said, moving toward him with his hand outstretched. “It’s good to see you.” He paused a moment to look around as if double-checking something, and then went on. “There’s so much I would like to discuss with you. Let’s go to lunch.” He grabbed his jacket off his chair, and quickly escorted Herb back to elevators.
I think it should be "back to the elevators" at the end there.
Posted By: VirginiaR Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 03/12/13 10:18 PM
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Originally posted by John Lambert:
I think it should just be "picked up that", I do not think you need the on.
Freudian slip? wink Thanks.

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I think that should just be "Menken started". Either that or you could maybe go with "Menken's office started".
Right. Have no idea what I was thinking here. Fixed.

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I think that should be "knew as many".
Nope, it isn't a comparison statement. He's Superman; he's actually "knew many" victims.

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I think there should be an "and between down and saw and a "the" in front of courtyard.
Wow, this was really rough. blush about the stuff that slipped through the cracks. Thanks.

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I think that should be "it to him" at the end of the first sentance.
Yes, that does make more sense. <<hits self with 2x4>> I do read these parts before posting, you know. Not that it's obvious. You're a treasure, John. Thanks.

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I think it should be "back to the elevators" at the end there.
When I type fast often articles get dropped. I often write in notebooks and transcribe onto the computer. I'm trying to read aloud my parts before posting now, but as I do it before bedtime, my brain function isn't always there. laugh Thanks. You'd be amazed at how many errors I actually FIXED before posting.
Posted By: John Lambert Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (39/??) - 03/13/13 12:29 AM
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There wasn’t anyone on it, but from experience he knew many people were hurt from falling debris as from the winds themselves.
This sentance is really bugging me. It makes sense through debris as is. However "as from the winds themselves" does not seem to be a whole phrase. The idea that "as many people" sets up the comparison. Or you could say "many more people were hurt from falling debris as from the winds themselves", or "many fewer ..." although I don't think that is what you meant. Maybe I am off base but the "as from the winds themselves" part seems to be setting up a comparison, but that is not how the first part is worded. The issue is not how many people Clark can know, but that the "as" compares the first part and the later part.

It would also work with "not just" instead of "as" before "the winds themselves".
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