Not sure whether to leave this as is, or expand on it. Let me know what you think.

Absolute, total no-brainer. Expand, please. We need to see where this goes!

Please, expand! This was very bittersweet and I want to see where it goes.

Definitely a Part 1 if I ever read one. Where's Clark been? What's he been up to? Has he had amnesia this whole two years?! Does he know he has super powers? Do his parents know? (I'm guessing not on the last two.) Please write more!

/pst. You had a typo in this line: I think that's supposed to be "jog".

Wow, I liked this a lot. It's a very intriguing beginning, especially considering the fact that Clark clearly has no idea who he is. I'm assuming, then, that he never found his parents either, which is pretty heartbreaking.

I love the way you describe Lois's emotional state right now. You paint a picture of the kind of world left when Clark is gone--Lois bereft, Perry helping her, and arrgh! Linda King triumphs again!

It really shows how much Lois is missing Clark when she actually takes the time to follow every one of the men who reminds her of him. And even though I know he's alive, the description of Superman dying in space was very sad.

I'd love it if you continued this story--certainly a different approach!

Really intriguing start! (like how i just assumed you will continue this?)

Seriously though. It's a really good premise and can stand alone, but I would like to know what happens in chapter two? Yes? Please? /bats lashes/

Shayne,

It's been too long since we've seen anything from you. Yes, please continue this. You are off to an excellent start.

This is fantastic. Please do give us more.

Joy,
Lynn

Intriguing story. As written, it focuses on Lois' emotions. I like that. The idea of Clark not knowing who he is would also be an interesting premise to expand on.

Joan

Definitely a part one ! I refuse to believe that you can be cruel enough to let us frustrated.

Oh, please, continue this! When I reached the ending and looked at the title and there wasn't "Part 1/?" I was so disappointed! This is a very intriguing start and I would love to see it developing in a complete story. There's so much in this premise! Please, don't stop there!

Andreia

If this was all there was on the subject, this is a great story. But, I bet if you manage to dig a little bit you'd find that you have another few chapters left inside begging to get out on paper. Please find those extra chapters and make us happy!

Thanks!
Pat

It would be sad not to complete this story. There are several questions running through my mind:

What has Clark been doing for two years?

How did he end up in New York City of all places?

How have Martha and Jonathan dealt with the 'loss' of their son?

There are so many track you could continue on! But there is one thing that should be done. Make sure to put Linda King in her place. A movie indeed!

This is definitely a part 1! I love your stories! Please expand! So many questions are still up in the air!

Loved it, more please. Laura

Delightful. A wonderful tale.

I'd leave this as a one shot. If you want to do a sequel I'm sure we'd all love to see it but this tale stand very very well by itself.

If you do decide to do a sequel could you fix something from "Superman Returns"?

"Why the World Doesn't Need Superman" is the title of Lois Lane's Pulitzer Prize winning editorial in the film. We are told almost nothing about the contents and everyone assumes it was a rip him to bits article.

In your tale you have written Clearly your Clark does not know who he is and frankly if he has his powers I can't see him not at least figuring out the Superman part.

So perhaps you could have your Clark injured with bits of kryptonite embedded keeping him powerless and a bit on the frail and ill side.

We know that over the years Clark has done a lot of different kinds of work as he traveled the world so he could be keeping it together doing some non reporting stuff.

During the course of your sequel before Clark is well and back to being Superman have Lois write an editorial explaining that the world does not need Superman. That his example lives on.

Indeed instead of a bitter editorial as in the movie it could be a series of uplifting and inspiring tales of heroism of everyday people around the world. The Superman's heroes series type of thing.

The series "Superman's heroes" has appeared in the comics and in some fanfics, a series of newspaper articles, by Clark Kent and sometimes by Lois & Clark, about the all too human heroes in our world. Often becoming a coffee table book with photos by James Olsen.

It would be really good if Lois figures out Clark was Superman before Clark regains his memory and is the one to realize that his scars contain kryptonite. Perhaps it is two or three years after nightfall and the Kents are doing a world cruse and unreachable so that the first they know of Clark's return is TV and newspaper coverage of a Superman Save.

You could even have Lois take the memory impaired powerless Clark to Smallville while the Kents are out of town on their cruse.

If would be nice if instead of saving a mere plane Clark's return could be an epic save. Save stopping a tsunami that would have killed millions.

In the movie SR Superman shows up on radar. Picture NORAD detecting Superman leaving the USA heading to stop the tsunami and thinking it is a missile launch.

Within seconds the radar and satellite tracking systems show it too small and too fast to be anything we've made. I can see a tech turning from his panel to the officer in charge and saying "Sir, that only thing that matches that profile is Superman."

Expand please! I loved Lois'realization of how she felt about Clark, so I would like to see Lois get her second chance. How does she reveal to Clark his past? Does he know that he doesnt know? Will it be a reveal, or just the return of the friendship/ falling in love part of the show? Howd he get to New York?

More please!javascript:void(0)

Great one-shot story or an intriguing beginning. Of course, my preference would be that you continue it. The other feedback have asked all of the relevant questions - how did he get to New York, why doesn't he have his super powers, what has he been doing, why didn't anyone connect the man with amnesia in NY to the missing journalist from Metropolis - but I'm more interested in what would happen next with the relationship between Lois and Clark. Clark's hopeful response was so telling. How would they progress with Lois (in a way) being Clark's savior.

More, please?

B

How do we know he lost his powers?

Morgana said: We don't. I assumed it given the description that Shayne gave us of Lois finding Clark in New York.
Now Shayne didn't mention that Clark had a full beard and long hair, (which he still might have), but I assume that Clark looks much like he did before he was lost. If I had lost my memories, but couldn't shave my beard the way most people do, then I might put two and two together and come up with Superman.


I could be wrong, though. I'll just have to wait for part two to find out more.

B

This is a well-crafted vignette which would also make a delightful setup for a longer tale. Have at it.

I have to admit I'm a little jealous of your ability to write powerful vignettes as well as intriguing epic-length stories. But jealous in the good way.

So while I'd be thrilled to read more of this premise, I also love it just the way it is.

Amber

Hmmm. More please?

So, let’s see…
Okay?

That sounds like Nightfall…

Yep.

Oh boy. Oh boy. Oh boy.



/grabs on to faint hope of a sequel/

Great viggy, Shayne!

Michael

Perfect as is. Except for what happened to Lex....
James

Great story. I go looking for a Riders of the Storm update and found this. Thanks!