Yay! A new Sue-fic!

It looks as though I get to start gathering the posse to free Lois.

I am enjoying this story; but I thought you said at the start that there wasn't much of an A-plot? Part one seemed to me to be almost entirely composed of A-plot. Does this mean that part 2 will quickly resolve the kidnapping, and that the remainder of the story will be relationship-driven?

BTW, Do you have a planned posting schedule?

Joy,
Lynn

Sue-fic?!?!
I have enjoyed the ride with you thus far and am sworn to secrecy about this fic

So happy for you Sue!!

Yea a new Sue Fic. Great start and looking forward to more.

Kathy
www.chili-everyway.com

Hi, I'm new here. I've been reading fic off these boards and the archives for several months now and have finally gotten up the nerve to post.

It seems only fitting that my virgin post is in response to a Sue!fic. That should be enough of a sacrifice to free Lois right?

I'm just ecstatic to be reading one of your stories in real time - although sed ecstasy lasted about as long as it took me to finish the section and realize that I don't have the other 9 to plough through in one sitting. However it does allow me the opportunity to leave you much deserved feedback, so count me as a lurker no more.

Now about the story...
Um, Lois is trapped in a pitch black room post-drugging - that does not seem decorative to me! Fix this please.

Let's get back to this! <bg>

Emily

so happy you're back!
but, evil!!!!!!!

Uh-oh. The large water jug, the mass of popcorn - those do sound like Lois might be in for a long stay. In the dark... gee, is her prison soundproofed too?

Why do I think that Superman might find it difficult to rescue Lois this time?

More soon, please!

I don't think I can say it too many times --- I love this story. Sue, you are a fantastic tease. I want more. More, more, more, I say. And I already *know* what's going to happen next.

This paragraph here is the reason I love reading Lois in your stories. Yes, she was drugged last night and now she's locked inside some sort of dark prison, but helpless she is not. Rawr!

Uh, huh. Hundreds. And almost all of them are BAAAAAD! Call me a sadist, but I love Clark's terror here.


Great cliff-hanger.

More.

Please.

NOW!

Lynn - Okay, you got me. There is an A-plot, but in my mind it's completely secondary to everything else that's going to happen. I just didn't want anyone going in with high expectations. A posting schedule? Well, that depends. How quickly I post the next part is entirely dependent on the story's reception. If there's a lot of interest, I could be enticed into posting as often as every couple of days. Otherwise I'll post about once a week. :p

Lola - Ha! I have this mental image of you caving under light torture and telling everyone how Perry snapped and put a hit out on Lois. Only the hit man fell in love with her and locked her up in his basement instead of killing her. And the whole time, poor Clark is searching everywhere and can't find her so he tortures himself by remembering how he almost told her the truth. Oh, wait, no. I take most of that back. Only one of those things happens. I think. It's all jumbled in my mind now. <heh>

Kate - You wouldn't believe how much it tickles me to see the words "Sue fic" and "yea" in the same sentence.

Emily!!! - See! Delurking wasn't nearly as scary as you thought, was it? I'm delighted beyond measure that you picked one of my stories to be your, uh, first. I hope you will find that part 2 was worth the short wait. You wanted more of them ogling each other and that's certainly in the cards. Thanks for the coming out to play!

sarahg - Awwww, thanks! I'm happy to be back! And evil.

Iolanthe - In the original snippet, Lois also had a five-gallon bucket. After a few paragraphs (and drinking the water), she realized why that bucket had been left for her. <heh> No, the prison is not soundproof. She's going to yell for help, of course, but no one is going to hear her. As for Superman rescuing her… well, that would be telling, wouldn't it?

BJ - Thank you! When I think about how many times I've subjected you to reading this story, it's immensely gratifying that you still want to read it again and that you would ask for more. I genuinely laughed out loud when you said you know what happens and you still want more. Or maybe that's because you know what happens?

In my head, Lois is never helpless, even when the odds are stacked against her. That's what I loved about her on the show and that's why I write her as kickass as possible in this story. Can I say "kickass"? I was going to put that in the story header, but I worried it would get auto-edited. As for Clark, well, I'm the kind of sick puppy that loves to torture him. Mmmm. His fear is delicious.


Thank you all for your replies - it's certainly given me the oomph to continue the arduous process of smoothing the rough edges. I have the first five parts completely written and my betas are working through them. The last five are written, but not yet ready for human consumption. I should be able to post part two either tomorrow night or Monday.

Nice start. I assumed the worst at first and was delighted to find the kidnapper's objective was not to simply rape her and then drop her on a random street corner.

Clark however has to assume that the use of a date rape drug is simply so someone can rape her and that Lois has already been raped.

I LOVED that you had Clark hear Lois calling for him but dismiss it.

And no listening for her heartbeat! Oh the pain you are going to put them through.

Frankly I don't know if I can watch, I'll have to see what next chapter brings.

I'm not worried about Lois - she'll figure a way out. The real suspense in this story is whether or not Lois will get her red heels back intact!

So how much feedback is required to induce you to post more frequently? Because I'll start a campaign if need be.

This is one of my favorite points in the series - Whine, Whine, Whine and And The Answer Is, so I'm thrilled that you are writing a story in that timeframe.

Can't wait for more!
Amber

Oh, my! So great to have a new story from you! But come back here and give us more right now!!!

Ooh! This looks fun! And hopefully there's enough feedback to help free Lois!! I have a guess as to who captured her... Dan Scardino?? Maybe deciding the best way to get her to go out with him is to drug her and kidnap her?

Excellent start! Can't wait to read the next part!!!

EOD, please! Or better yet, if you are choosing your moments then, to quote Lois from OP, "This one! This moment! Pick this one!"

Joy,
Lynn

The overnight returns are in!

Amber - Okay, you got me. It's Scardino and Lex working together! <shudders at the thought> They both get mentions, but not as suspects. Lex is where he belongs - in prison on Stryker's Island. Dan's been reassigned to someplace else and he's currently trying to schmooze some other woman into dating him by mentioning his dead partner/girlfriend in an attempt to show how sensitive he is. Gah! I think Dan makes my skin crawl even more than Lex did.

I love that you've analyzed the two lines her attacker did speak in an attempt at figuring out who he could be. You get bonus points for that!

Lynn - With my reply, it's bumped the thread three away from the magic number my greedy muse demands.

In actuality, I'm still waiting to hear back from two of my betas on part 2. I'm comfortable with it, but I value their opinions enough to want to hold out for a little bit longer.

Thanks for the replies, you guys!

/me rummages around in my inbox and squees at finding part 3!

Hi Sue!

Before I go all new waff-fic.

4. Got really scared. There've been way too many Lois-(almost)-gets-date-raped stories out there in the past two years or so to make this a topic that's not angsty. But there's hope. You didn't mention any WHAMs so, I keep reading on with just a minor panic attack instead of reading on with a full-blown hyperventilating panic attack.

5. Oh dear. Oh dear. Oh dear. /goes back to recheck A/N, just in case I missed something/

7. Yes. A shoe for Clark to find.

8. I'm scared beyond laughing. Otherwise I'd be LMAO. So this must do:
*NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO*

Michael

PS: Loved it. More. Please?

Yay, another Sue fic!

Sue!

What a nice surprise to see you posting. This one has a scary start. Nine parts to go. I can't wait!

Write on
Anne

Ohhh, Sue Fic! You love to torture us and we love to be tortured. Is there a word for that?
So how much and how often do we need to reply? I certainly vote for EOD!
Does a little bowing and scraping help?
Do multiple replies from one person count as more than one?
Any significance that the shoe was red? You could have then called it "The Red Shoe Diaries."
Heh
More soon. Make my day nice, please?

Artemis

Sue fic! Yippee!

I don't actually have time to give feedback now, but I wanted to at least add a post to the tally. Are we getting any closer to EOD?

- Vicki

Thank you!

hurray! I'm so happy right now! I love your stories - they always make me laugh.

LOVING this!!

After reading my first SueFic recently, I can understand all the at another one. I feel for Clark, but I'm for Lois. Clark would never forgive himself if something worse than kidnapping ever happened to Lois when he was out on a date with her.

Ok, can't wait any longer to write more... Off to part 2...