FDK - From the Outside (1/1) - 10/24/10 09:40 AM
As always, all comments welcomed.
Joy,
Lynn
Joy,
Lynn
Re: FDK - From the Outside (1/1) - 10/24/10 12:40 PM
Interesting; much more academic than I was expecting. Even so, it's good to know that Clark will be keeping an eye on Jeff. 
Re: FDK - From the Outside (1/1) - 10/24/10 01:59 PM
I like how Superman decides to break his facade and open up to the boy to show Jeff just how much he does understand the loneliness.
Great companion piece.
Great companion piece.
Re: FDK - From the Outside (1/1) - 10/24/10 02:41 PM
Delightful, however it is clearly going to blow up in his face.
I can see the headline on the "National Tattler"
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Although it would be dangerous for Jeff to be known publicly as Superman’s friend, I don’t think it would be too risky for me to stop by on occasion to see how he is doing.
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Superman a Super Pedophile
Re: FDK - From the Outside (1/1) - 10/24/10 07:02 PM
Nice story!
Re: FDK - From the Outside (1/1) - 10/25/10 02:29 PM
Mary, I hope the story approach didn't prove too disappointing.
Plain Jane, thank you, and welcome to the MB.
Patrick, unfortunately, you are probably right about the Tattler and the Whisperer -- if they should catch wind of Clark's visits, they undoubtedly would portray an innocent act in such a salacious, fallacious manner. And it is a sad commentary on our society that these rags' RL counterparts not only make enough money to stay in business, they apparently make enough to justify their getting prime real estate near stores' cash registers.
Laura, thank you for leaving feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Joy,
Lynn
Plain Jane, thank you, and welcome to the MB.
Patrick, unfortunately, you are probably right about the Tattler and the Whisperer -- if they should catch wind of Clark's visits, they undoubtedly would portray an innocent act in such a salacious, fallacious manner. And it is a sad commentary on our society that these rags' RL counterparts not only make enough money to stay in business, they apparently make enough to justify their getting prime real estate near stores' cash registers.
Laura, thank you for leaving feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Joy,
Lynn
Re: FDK - From the Outside (1/1) - 10/25/10 02:47 PM
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Originally posted by Lynn S. M.:
Mary, I hope the story approach didn't prove too disappointing.
Mary, I hope the story approach didn't prove too disappointing.
The other thing that bothers me is that the mini-epilogue at the end seems to negate the need for a sequel.
Re: FDK - From the Outside (1/1) - 10/27/10 09:05 PM
Glad to see Clark's POV! That's sweet that Clark plans to keep such a careful eye on Jeff. I love the comparisons with Lois--and it was interesting to see Clark's frustration with Lois's Superman love.
Re: FDK - From the Outside (1/1) - 10/27/10 11:23 PM
Ah! Here it is.
Great line!
You did a nice job of making Jeff’s story (Looking In) have a completely different feel than this one. What I mean by that is that Jeff’s story was in language that a smart nine-year-old would use while Clark’s story is in language that he would use.
Awesome.
Nah! I can see it now. Jeff grows up, goes to work at The Planet (like Jimmy), finds out Clark’s secret, and....
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Going to visit Lois as Superman is like getting a fix for a crack addict: I pay for my few minutes’ high with a subsequent low,
You did a nice job of making Jeff’s story (Looking In) have a completely different feel than this one. What I mean by that is that Jeff’s story was in language that a smart nine-year-old would use while Clark’s story is in language that he would use.
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I have a sort of “spiritual x-ray vision.
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the mini-epilogue at the end seems to negate the need for a sequel.
Re: FDK - From the Outside (1/1) - 10/28/10 11:21 AM
Mary, I'm glad that the story itself wasn't disappointing. I don't have any ideas for a sequel at the moment, but I am not ruling it out entirely. If my muse cooperates and gives me one, I would be delighted to write it up.
Deja Vu, Thank you! I had enjoyed having Jeff be like Clark in some ways and like Lois in others.
Nancy, You picked out two of me favourite lines from the story. Thank you! And I'm pleased that the narrators' voices for the two were sufficiently different. And thanks again for GE-ing Looking In. I'll be submitting From the Outside to the archive soon...
Joy,
Lynn
I don't have any ideas for a sequel at the moment, but I am not ruling it out entirely. If my muse cooperates and gives me one, I would be delighted to write it up.Deja Vu, Thank you! I had enjoyed having Jeff be like Clark in some ways and like Lois in others.
Nancy, You picked out two of me favourite lines from the story. Thank you!
And I'm pleased that the narrators' voices for the two were sufficiently different. And thanks again for GE-ing Looking In. I'll be submitting From the Outside to the archive soon...Joy,
Lynn
Re: FDK - From the Outside (1/1) - 10/28/10 07:20 PM
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Originally posted by Lynn S. M.:
but I am not ruling it out entirely. If my muse cooperates and gives me one, I would be delighted to write it up.
but I am not ruling it out entirely. If my muse cooperates and gives me one, I would be delighted to write it up.
