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Story Comments? (Note: I know I've been posting on Sunday instead of Saturday lately. I got placed on yet another committee at work--with meetings that I have to attend after working hours--plus I'm starting rehearsals for the Ramona Outdoor Play, which will be performed in April and May. This is my 20th year with the show, but I still need to rehearse.)
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"Oh, you can’t help that," said the Cat: "we’re all mad here. I’m mad. You’re mad."
"How do you know I’m mad?" said Alice.
"You must be," said the Cat, "or you wouldn’t have come here.”
- Lewis Carroll, Alice in Wonderland
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I have been enjoying this story from the start keep up the great work! Keep posting I don't care which day Saturdays or Sundays, I check most every day. I keep wondering how you will fix Clark's problem with Snow and if Lois is still alive?
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The only problem with posting late Sunday is that I am late for work on Monday as I always take time to read the next part as soon as I can. Very nicely written and developing at a good pace. Having said that can't wait to learn what really happened to Lois. I think we will find out on the Victory Tour.
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I haven't been commenting, but I have been reading.
I sympathize with Clark's revulsion at the double standard forced on him. He's supposed to live as if there were plenty to go around for all, yet his own parents could barely make it if he weren't there to help. His heart - and his guilt - pushed him into giving Becky's family money and extra food. His rural Kansas upbringing and his sense of duty gets him up in the morning to help his parents at the farm (the fact that the camera crew hates him for it is just gravy). And he's pressured by President Snow's knowledge of his powers, although I doubt that Snow knows everything that Clark can do.
I was so sad when Rachel walked out on him. It's hard to blame her, since they did kind of have an understanding with each other. Had he not been Reaped, they probably would have married. I think she could have handled his "specialness."
And since this is a Lois & Clark forum (something of which I have been gently reminded in the past), I can't envision Lois being permanently gone from this narrative. Perhaps her physician father pulled her out of the frozen coma Clark put her in and healed her bloody wounds. If he did, however, the outcome of these Games is in disarray, since both Clark and Lois survived. My bet would be that Lois goes to District 9 under cover and marries Clark using an assumed name to keep herself safe - and they discover that, by working together, they can topple the current tyrannical regime and replace it with something better. What might that something better be? I guess I'll have to Read And Find Out.
Anyway, you have a fan. And I hope you can keep up your posting schedule. I know how tough that can be. I can't wait to see how you resolve all of this.
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I'm glad that something positive has come out of Clark's Hunger Games victory. Parcel Day is a good thing.
But this chapter seems like the calm before the storm. I'm sure President Snow has plans for Clark.
Looking forward to more!
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“Where were you when we got here?” he asked Clark. “You had five and a half hours between the time you left to see your parents and our arrival.”
“It’s three miles to the farm,” Clark pointed out. “Not only is it a long way, but there’s a lot of work to do. Also, I had breakfast with them.” As mentioned before, this guy really gets on my nerves. I wonder how he would feel if his child had been reaped? As a member of Captiolite society his world is completely insulated against that sort of thing. Pity, seeing his reaction to being reaped or worse the threat of becoming an Avox might be just the comeuppance he deserves. Marcius glanced at the clock on the wall. “There’s no time to fix things now. We need to get to the mayor’s house for the banquet, or we’ll be late.” He looked at Clark. “Maybe you can buy a car with some of your winnings. Then you could get places more quickly.”
Clark just gave him an annoyed look. Jonathan and Martha laughed softly, but when Marcius looked at them questioningly, they just stopped and didn’t say a word. LOL!!  If only that annoying snob knew the truth. Now that the cameras were gone, Clark hoped that his life could get back to some semblance of normalcy. It was harvest time, so he had plenty to keep him occupied, and he could only hope that if he worked long and hard enough, he could push away the memories that plagued him and brought terrible dreams each night. Definitely the calm before the storm ...
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Originally posted by G. Kuhn:
I have been enjoying this story from the start keep up the great work! Keep posting I don't care which day Saturdays or Sundays, I check most every day. I keep wondering how you will fix Clark's problem with Snow and if Lois is still alive? Only time will tell. I will say, though, that I am trying to follow Hunger Games canon, so if you read the books and see the movies, it'll give you some clues.
"Oh, you can’t help that," said the Cat: "we’re all mad here. I’m mad. You’re mad."
"How do you know I’m mad?" said Alice.
"You must be," said the Cat, "or you wouldn’t have come here.”
- Lewis Carroll, Alice in Wonderland
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Originally posted by AndyG:
The only problem with posting late Sunday is that I am late for work on Monday as I always take time to read the next part as soon as I can. Very nicely written and developing at a good pace. Having said that can't wait to learn what really happened to Lois. I think we will find out on the Victory Tour. Hmm ... maybe, maybe not ... 
"Oh, you can’t help that," said the Cat: "we’re all mad here. I’m mad. You’re mad."
"How do you know I’m mad?" said Alice.
"You must be," said the Cat, "or you wouldn’t have come here.”
- Lewis Carroll, Alice in Wonderland
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Originally posted by Terry Leatherwood:
I sympathize with Clark's revulsion at the double standard forced on him. He's supposed to live as if there were plenty to go around for all, yet his own parents could barely make it if he weren't there to help. His heart - and his guilt - pushed him into giving Becky's family money and extra food. His rural Kansas upbringing and his sense of duty gets him up in the morning to help his parents at the farm (the fact that the camera crew hates him for it is just gravy). And he's pressured by President Snow's knowledge of his powers, although I doubt that Snow knows everything that Clark can do. Clark is a decent person, but he's found out the hard way that he can't help everyone, and sometimes can't do anything, in spite of his powers. He finds the hypocrisy and sheer cluelessness of the Capitolites very aggravating. Snow might not know everything about Clark, but he knows enough to use him. Clark is having to learn fast about what a dangerous world victors occupy. I was so sad when Rachel walked out on him. It's hard to blame her, since they did kind of have an understanding with each other. Had he not been Reaped, they probably would have married. I think she could have handled his "specialness." Probably, especially since she has some inkling that there's something different about him. She doesn't quite know what it is, but she has noticed that he's stronger and tougher than other people. And since this is a Lois & Clark forum (something of which I have been gently reminded in the past), I can't envision Lois being permanently gone from this narrative. Perhaps her physician father pulled her out of the frozen coma Clark put her in and healed her bloody wounds. If he did, however, the outcome of these Games is in disarray, since both Clark and Lois survived. My bet would be that Lois goes to District 9 under cover and marries Clark using an assumed name to keep herself safe - and they discover that, by working together, they can topple the current tyrannical regime and replace it with something better. What might that something better be? I guess I'll have to Read And Find Out. Yep, everyone will have to Read and Find Out. There's a lot of speculation about Lois's fate. All I can say is: keep reading. Alive or dead, she definitely has an effect on Clark's life. Anyway, you have a fan. And I hope you can keep up your posting schedule. I know how tough that can be. I can't wait to see how you resolve all of this. Thanks.  I'm trying to keep up with the posting schedule, though thus far this new year has been a busy one.
"Oh, you can’t help that," said the Cat: "we’re all mad here. I’m mad. You’re mad."
"How do you know I’m mad?" said Alice.
"You must be," said the Cat, "or you wouldn’t have come here.”
- Lewis Carroll, Alice in Wonderland
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Originally posted by IolantheAlias:
I'm glad that something positive has come out of Clark's Hunger Games victory. Parcel Day is a good thing. The monthly Parcel Day is the Capitol's reward to the district for producing a victor. Food for a year is a great prize to people on the edge of starvation. But this chapter seems like the calm before the storm. I'm sure President Snow has plans for Clark. Or maybe like the eye of the hurricane. Clark's been through a lot, but these moments of calm don't signal the end of the storm.
"Oh, you can’t help that," said the Cat: "we’re all mad here. I’m mad. You’re mad."
"How do you know I’m mad?" said Alice.
"You must be," said the Cat, "or you wouldn’t have come here.”
- Lewis Carroll, Alice in Wonderland
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Originally posted by Morgana: “Where were you when we got here?” he asked Clark. “You had five and a half hours between the time you left to see your parents and our arrival.”
“It’s three miles to the farm,” Clark pointed out. “Not only is it a long way, but there’s a lot of work to do. Also, I had breakfast with them.” As mentioned before, this guy really gets on my nerves. I wonder how he would feel if his child had been reaped? As a member of Capitolite society his world is completely insulated against that sort of thing. Pity, seeing his reaction to being reaped or worse the threat of becoming an Avox might be just the comeuppance he deserves. Marcius has very definite ideas about how things should be, and he really has no clue about the reality of life for people in District 9. As a Capitolite, he never had to face the prospect of being sent into the arena, and he doesn't have to fear losing a child to the arena. He knows that most kids sent to the arena die -- Clark is the only kid he's escorted to the Games who has come home alive -- but he genuinely doesn't understand why no one in District 9 considers it to be an honor to participate in the Hunger Games. Marcius glanced at the clock on the wall. “There’s no time to fix things now. We need to get to the mayor’s house for the banquet, or we’ll be late.” He looked at Clark. “Maybe you can buy a car with some of your winnings. Then you could get places more quickly.”
Clark just gave him an annoyed look. Jonathan and Martha laughed softly, but when Marcius looked at them questioningly, they just stopped and didn’t say a word. LOL!! If only that annoying snob knew the truth.  Yep, Clark doesn't need a car to get places quickly. And given the condition of the roads in District 9, cars aren't usually the best choice for transportation. Now that the cameras were gone, Clark hoped that his life could get back to some semblance of normalcy. It was harvest time, so he had plenty to keep him occupied, and he could only hope that if he worked long and hard enough, he could push away the memories that plagued him and brought terrible dreams each night. Definitely the calm before the storm ... Definitely. The dreams are just the beginning ...
"Oh, you can’t help that," said the Cat: "we’re all mad here. I’m mad. You’re mad."
"How do you know I’m mad?" said Alice.
"You must be," said the Cat, "or you wouldn’t have come here.”
- Lewis Carroll, Alice in Wonderland
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